The flowers in the garden
expressing colours and variance
spreading fragrance and beauty
fascinate.
Those that go to make a garland
of roses, bright red in hue
the other of Jasmine, pure white
sensitize the beholder.
The deities stand resplendent
with flowery adornments
Weddings include a space where
bouquets stand out proud.
Garlands symbolize and synchronize
illustrating the unification. offered
to guests of honour, being one
of pride and celebration
Romance begins with a flower,
decorations exhibit flowery trails,
flowers being never partisan
make way to respect the departed.
String of Flowers
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Re: String of Flowers
I like the tone of this poem, and the flow. It would be stronger if it relied more on imagery and less on telling, though. As an exercise, try using just imagery to convey the same scene and emotions. William Carlos Williams often uses images alone, as in "Flowers by the Sea".
Flowers by the Sea
By William Carlos Williams
When over the flowery, sharp pasture’s
edge, unseen, the salt ocean
lifts its form—chicory and daisies
tied, released, seem hardly flowers alone
but color and the movement—or the shape
perhaps—of restlessness, whereas
the sea is circled and sways
peacefully upon its plantlike stem
Flowers by the Sea
By William Carlos Williams
When over the flowery, sharp pasture’s
edge, unseen, the salt ocean
lifts its form—chicory and daisies
tied, released, seem hardly flowers alone
but color and the movement—or the shape
perhaps—of restlessness, whereas
the sea is circled and sways
peacefully upon its plantlike stem
Re: String of Flowers
I will try, Bob.
Do not how far I will succeed.
Anyhow, thanks for commenting.
Do not how far I will succeed.
Anyhow, thanks for commenting.
meenas17
Re: String of Flowers
I like the line: "flowers being never partisan:
I think Bob has given you something to think about. I, too, don't use enough imagery. I'm working at it.
I think Bob has given you something to think about. I, too, don't use enough imagery. I'm working at it.