We all wear fluorescent green vests,
position ourselves 8 feet abreast.
The undergrowth is knee high and we swing sticks as we walk, calling his name.
The search leader has a walkie-talkie.
She calls no smoking.It is quiet.
It's three days since the boy's
been gone, thirteen, good looking.
This morning, the dogs got a hit
by the river bank. His clothes.
It is hard not to admire
the well groomed hair. The way
the klieg lights play off the
toad -belly white of his skin.
Body In The River
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Re: Body In The River
A strong objective poem....love these lines best
His clothes.
It is hard not to admire
the well groomed hair.
His clothes.
It is hard not to admire
the well groomed hair.
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Re: Body In The River
'Klieg' is a new word for me.
The undergrowth is knee-high and we swing sticks as we walk, calling his name.--this long line seems to walk in the poem.
I also like the abrupt ending.
The undergrowth is knee-high and we swing sticks as we walk, calling his name.--this long line seems to walk in the poem.
I also like the abrupt ending.
Re: Body In The River
Wow, this is so good.
Should second stanza be a couplet, too.
I nom this poem.
Should second stanza be a couplet, too.
I nom this poem.
Re: Body In The River
I guess it might be too late.