Father said,'Your New Family'.

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RamanathanSiva
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Father said,'Your New Family'.

#1 Post by RamanathanSiva » 23 Dec 2020, 14:21

When my father gave me away, he gave me up
to my in-laws, literally. To me, he said, ‘henceforth
that is your family. I walked in, open-eyed.

First I could never gossip, my mother closed her ears.
I could inform deaths and births;’ they are good people ‘he said
and that was it. I worked at these relationships.
Rehearsing my speech, until it became my own.

Daddy had a way of dissociating himself, marking the Gita
'Affection through dissociation,' he bemused.

When he died I found it in his diary, he had written
he had made me self-sufficient and nameworthy.

When my relatives had told me the story of Dhatchayani
I had stood firm as wood, made my own mythology.

The scent and smell of poetry helped.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Father said,'Your New Family'.

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 24 Dec 2020, 07:03

Hard but beautiful. My 2nd nom this month

BobBradshaw
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Re: Father said,'Your New Family'.

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 24 Dec 2020, 21:56

Well done. I like the tone throughout

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