"spoken word artist" (micropoem, revised)

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Michael (MV)
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"spoken word artist" (micropoem, revised)

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 07 Mar 2021, 18:58

 
The parable
is through the voice
of the protagonist.

His
"Prodigal Son"
                  --- autobiographical
 

BobBradshaw
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Re: micropoem:

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 08 Mar 2021, 06:45

I like the sounds in this.

Michael (MV)
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Re: micropoem:

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 10 Mar 2021, 18:01

Hi Bob,

Before the revision, did it sound like Jesus Christ is the Prodigal Son?

Not because anyone or an institution's dogma told me; moreover, my faith told me, and that's how I was movedinspired to write it, micro, without the long wind of preachiness.

Thanks, Bob, for visiting

😎

Michael (MV)

BobBradshaw wrote:
08 Mar 2021, 06:45
I like the sounds in this.

Kenneth2816
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Re: "spoken word artist" (micropoem, revised)

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Mar 2021, 18:55

Not much on performance poetry. I get the theology though.

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