Caterpillar

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BobBradshaw
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Caterpillar

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 07 Mar 2021, 23:02

Since you asked, Michael, this is the only one I have that is a concrete shaped visual....

Caterpillar


As a teenager
I was inexplicably
optimistic--
and maybe
the humble
caterpillar
instinctively
too feels
something
special
is meant
for him--
that despite
his tacky
suit—
yellow,
black
and white
striped—
and his
inherent
laziness,
he will surely
emerge
from his
heavy footed
ways
in a manner
he never
could have
seen—
wings opening
into a sticky
light

Michael (MV)
Posts: 2154
Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: Caterpillar

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 09 Mar 2021, 14:34

Hi Bob,

It is difficult & tedious to post a customized, shaped format.

Try this:

Make a copy of the concrete poem in its visual shape.

Then bookend the paste copy with the code </> from the selections above.
It's the 5th from the left, after the code for quote.

The text will probably appear smaller & greenish; but hopefully will appears close to the shape of the original.

^^ Hope this helps, to at least a sufficient extent.

For workshop purposes, the justified to the left version will serve to compare/contrast with shaped.

😎

Michael (MV)

BobBradshaw wrote:
07 Mar 2021, 23:02
Since you asked, Michael, this is the only one I have that is a concrete shaped visual....

Caterpillar


As a teenager
I was inexplicably
optimistic--
and maybe
the humble
caterpillar
instinctively
too feels
something
special
is meant
for him--
that despite
his tacky
suit—
yellow,
black
and white
striped—
and his
inherent
laziness,
he will surely
emerge
from his
heavy footed
ways
in a manner
he never
could have
seen—
wings opening
into a sticky
light

BobBradshaw
Posts: 2688
Joined: 03 Jun 2016, 21:03

Re: Caterpillar

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 10 Mar 2021, 04:28

Thanks, Michael

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