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Billy
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White

#1 Post by Billy » 25 Oct 2022, 01:59

White

Somehow the good guys
dress in white
unblemished by their wants.

In bed with stained
sheets even bleach
won't annul

like the priest
annulled my past marriage.
The new one couldn't wear white.

I wore a ribbon shirt ,
flower print,
no spot of white

except me,
marrying a red woman
who could care less

if she wore white.
The sclera
remarkable in her

dark, sincere face,
a marksman's target
like the buffalo.

BobBradshaw
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Re: White

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 Oct 2022, 00:04

Wow, strong poem, Billy. A nom unless you come up with something even more remarkable.

SivakamiVelliangiri
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Joined: 23 Jan 2022, 15:37

Re: White

#3 Post by SivakamiVelliangiri » 11 Nov 2022, 22:40

Yes.Bold last lines.

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