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PostPosted: 26 Feb 2018, 19:41 
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Voice your recommendation(s) here, and

Please let us know ASAP if you are not going to be available to represent the Writer's Block -

then we will know not to consider your poems further this month's IBPC.

I/we will be looking for consensus - in keeping with a communal workshop environment

Which 1-3 would we like to see represent the Writer's Block in the finals?

After the 3 are selected, then will each author post - in this thread - the poem as the poet would like it forwarded,

and ALL the needed info/statements

Ideally, the only poems that really need to appear here are the final 3, when announced, hopefully by the 1st of January, if not sooner

^^ the intent is organizational - if poems appear here before the selection of the final 3, then there is a congestion -

Until the final 3 are announced, please maintain poems & workshopping to the Workshop Forum. Thanks.



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any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome!

and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules


In this thread, from the poems posted in the workshop forum during the course of the month, recommend/nominate by title & author.

Nominated poets, please acknowledge the nomination here in this thread.
Please reply by accepting or declining the nomination - in this thread.

Please note & observe: This is not a workshopping thread.

In this thread, poems that are ultimately selected to represent the Block are then posted here
as the author would like for the poem to be forwarded
along with all IBPC required info.

When the 1-3 poems are decided upon, and permission granted by each author of the selected poems,

along with all the info needed by each author:



1/Your name

2/e-mail address

3/statement that the poem is your original

4/and unpublished work

5/and that you are not representing in the current IBPC

6/and the poem as you would like it forwarded to the finals.

^^ All of the above is the usual needed info as part of the process.


I will then forward the 1-3 to the IBPC finals.


Thanks

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PostPosted: 27 Feb 2018, 00:47 
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Heart With No Permanent Address

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PostPosted: 27 Feb 2018, 02:13 
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Removed.


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PostPosted: 27 Feb 2018, 02:38 
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I nominate Frank’s “Lagos” poem.


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PostPosted: 27 Feb 2018, 05:41 
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I also nominate Bernie’s poem “Japanese Wings Over New Guinea”


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PostPosted: 27 Feb 2018, 12:18 
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Thanks Bob, I accept Lagos (1867) nom.

I also Second (vote) for your nom
of Bernie's: Japanese Wings Over New Guinea

I understand you are out this month Bob?


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PostPosted: 27 Feb 2018, 22:34 
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I second Lagos


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PostPosted: 28 Feb 2018, 00:09 
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Right, Frank....but thx for asking...best


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 Post subject: Land of my Father's-Eira
PostPosted: 28 Feb 2018, 03:28 
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I nominate Eira's Poem:
Note: This poem was posted in January and workshopped on 4th February 2018

If Eira accepts the nomination I would ask if this would serve as an epitaph:

Anthem at my Father's Funeral

Mae hen wlad fy nhadau yn annwyl i mi,
Gwlad beirdd a chantorion, enwogion o fri;
Ei gwrol ryfelwyr, gwladgarwyr tra mâd,
Tros ryddid gollasant eu gwaed.


Old Land of my Fathers
Lyrics by Evan James January 1856
music by James James

I'd lost the music deep inside
me, dormant since my father died
until I heard the miners sing,
Land of my Father's surging tide
of harmonies. I burned with pride.
Through passing time its timbre wrings
emotions still - this ancestry
my forefathers bequeathed to me.

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Suggest 'resonance' to replace 'timbre', Eira's choice.


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 Post subject: Michael's: "Revival"
PostPosted: 28 Feb 2018, 03:41 
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I nominate Michael's: "Revival"


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PostPosted: 01 Mar 2018, 17:40 
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FranktheFrank wrote:
I nominate Eira's Poem:
Note: This poem was posted in January and workshopped on 4th February 2018

If Eira accepts the nomination I would ask if this would serve as an epitaph:

Anthem at my Father's Funeral

Mae hen wlad fy nhadau yn annwyl i mi,
Gwlad beirdd a chantorion, enwogion o fri;
Ei gwrol ryfelwyr, gwladgarwyr tra mâd,
Tros ryddid gollasant eu gwaed.


Old Land of my Fathers
Lyrics by Evan James January 1856
music by James James


I'd lost the music deep inside
me, dormant since my father died
until I heard the miners sing,
Land of my Father's surging tide
of harmonies. I burned with pride.
Through passing time its timbre wrings
emotions still - this ancestry
my forefathers bequeathed to me.

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Suggest 'resonance' to replace 'timbre', Eira's choice.


Thank you Frank and I will accept the nomination.

It is a nice idea to have a verse from the anthem as an epitaph (especially as my huitain is not that long) My only concern is that as it is written in Welsh most people cannot read it. Perhaps someone else would comment.

Although resonance is a good replacement for timbre it is 3 syllable and would not fit the meter of a huitain. I looked in a few dictionaries for another word but nothing was suitable (except timbre was mentioned as a synonym for resonance)

As you are the only person who doesn't like 'timbre' (I've had it on a number of sites) I'll stick with it unless I am inspired otherwise :)

Thanks Frank

Eira


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PostPosted: 01 Mar 2018, 20:43 
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Epitaphs don't have to be in English.
Let them look it up.

Syllable count doesn't make this iambic
so you could do what you like with it
even sacrifice the rhyme scheme
which isn't regular anyway.

Timbre is such an old fashioned word.

You could drop the 'me' in the 2nd line
and this would improve the reading,
the enjambment isn't helping at all.

I'd lost the music deep inside
dormant since my father died


How about:
Old Land of my Father's: a surging
tide of harmony. I burn with pride
when I hear it sang, its resonance
brings emotions still - of ancestry
that my fathers bequeathed to me.

best wishes in the contest.


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PostPosted: 02 Mar 2018, 00:59 
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FranktheFrank wrote:
Epitaphs don't have to be in English.
Let them look it up.

Syllable count doesn't make this iambic
so you could do what you like with it
even sacrifice the rhyme scheme
which isn't regular anyway.

Timbre is such an old fashioned word.

You could drop the 'me' in the 2nd line
and this would improve the reading,
the enjambment isn't helping at all.

I'd lost the music deep inside
dormant since my father died


How about:
Old Land of my Father's: a surging
tide of harmony. I burn with pride
when I hear it sang, its resonance
brings emotions still - of ancestry
that my fathers bequeathed to me.

best wishes in the contest.


Thank you Frank

Huitains have various rhyme schemes, which MUST be adhered to.

This one is -

Rhyme scheme AAB AAB CC (not regular but some are even more irregular) I particularly like working with this rhyme scheme.

8 line verse
8 syllable per line (can be 10 per line)

Unfortunately your suggestion would really mess up the rhyme scheme and number of syllables per line (making quite a few 9 syllables per line) Also the rhythm would not read so smoothly.

I really don't want to make changes to more than one line just for one word, especially at this late stage and would prefer it not go forward to IBPC if you are still not satisfied.

Sorry I've too many other things on my mind.

Eira


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PostPosted: 02 Mar 2018, 01:08 
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Just suggestions Eira
It is you who needs to be satisfied.
I am happy when you are happy.


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PostPosted: 03 Mar 2018, 02:32 
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FranktheFrank wrote:
Just suggestions Eira
It is you who needs to be satisfied.
I am happy when you are happy.


I'm satisfied, Frank. :)
Eira


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 Post subject: Lagos (1967)
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I Ieuan ap Hywel - ieuanaphywel@aol.com
state that this poem is my original work
and that it has not been published before
and that I am not being represented in the IBPC
and this is my poem:

Just us two in the rickety bus
hitting every pothole on the way
back to the airport.

BOAC's Boeing 707 to Schiphol,
refuelling at Mali. A date
with desert dates for dessert.

You looked every inch royalty
at the checkout in your smart suit
and J. K. pillbox hat.

We fidgeted until callout and held
each other. You disappeared
behind the departure console.

The long flight back to the crude oil
of the Niger, your intimate perfume
hangs in the empty wardrobe.


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PostPosted: 03 Mar 2018, 22:03 
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I second Eiras poem as she has written it


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PostPosted: 04 Mar 2018, 02:49 
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Kenneth2816 wrote:
I second Eiras poem as she has written it



Thank you Kenneth :)

Any thoughts on the epitaph in Welsh. As no one else has commented I will include it.

Eira


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PostPosted: 04 Mar 2018, 02:51 
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As Kenneth has seconded the nomination I presume I am ok for IBPC


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PostPosted: 04 Mar 2018, 03:00 
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Eira Needham
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This is my original, unpublished work
I am not representing any other site this month in IBPC


Anthem at my Father’s Funeral

Mae hen wlad fy nhadau yn annwyl i mi,
Gwlad beirdd a chantorion, enwogion o fri;
Ei gwrol ryfelwyr, gwladgarwyr tra mâd,
Tros ryddid gollasant eu gwaed.

‘Old Land of my Fathers’
Lyrics by Evan James January 1856, music by James James


I'd lost the music deep inside
me, dormant since my father died
until I heard the miners sing,
Land of my Father's surging tide
of harmonies. I burned with pride.
Through passing time its timbre wrings
emotions still - this ancestry
my forefathers bequeathed to me.


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PostPosted: 04 Mar 2018, 05:22 
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Good Luck Eira


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PostPosted: 04 Mar 2018, 08:05 
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Anthem at my Father’s Funeral

Lagos (1967)

Japanese Wings Over New Guinea

^^ waiting for bernie to accept or decline, and provide the essential info & poem as he would like it forwarded


Thanks Eira; Thanks Frank: Good Luck in the finals

8)

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Thanks Michael
best wishes to all.


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PostPosted: 05 Mar 2018, 04:16 
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Thanks everyone - good luck Frank and Bernie

Eira


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PostPosted: 05 Mar 2018, 09:22 
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I have PM'd Bernie.

Hope to hear from him ASAP.


A productive week to us all

every one

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Michael (MV)


 

 

 
 
 
 
 
 


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