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 Post subject: The Convent School
PostPosted: 12 May 2018, 23:40 
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Riding pillion on a bicycle
my shoes tumbled
down the over-bridge
landed on the railway track
many feet below.

Uncle fetched my shoes
as i knew he would,
my school girl trick
that found him returning
with my saddle oxford,
exhausted.I heard uncle panting.

The prank repeated,
I always arrived
late for the Assembly.
Adeleide knocked my knuckles
with a sideways slanting ruler.
My friends knew how to withdraw
their palms before the slash
but I stood like a tree
motionless awaiting the pain.

The land just sloped down
three men’s height.
No parapet walls to mark
playgrounds. One playground
fell into the other, stones and mud
and patched-up concrete.
The reason why I abhorred school
was my poor eye sight;

The noise of bully boys alone
helped me to measure distances,
sometimes the prayer ground
announced a long fortnight’s holiday.


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 Post subject: Re: The Convent School
PostPosted: 12 May 2018, 23:48 
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I am confused about what is happening in the 2nd stanza, and if it relates to S1.

However, I love the final stanza:

The noise of bully boys alone
helped me to measure distances,
sometimes the prayer ground
announced a long fortnight’s holiday.


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 Post subject: Re: The Convent School
PostPosted: 13 May 2018, 05:09 
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I will have to work on it. I have to say it was uncle who climbed down to fetch the missing shoes, and came up panting.
Thank you, Bob.


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 Post subject: Re: The Convent School
PostPosted: 13 May 2018, 05:39 
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Siva---

a shocking, sad glimpse into Tamil education methods.


the vivid images stick deep in my brain.


I heard uncle panting.
This was the game
of a school-hating kid.


Uncle fetched my shoes
as i knew he would,
my school girl trick
that found him returning
with my saddle oxford,
exhausted.



but greatly enjoyed.


bernie


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 Post subject: Re: The Convent School
PostPosted: 13 May 2018, 07:23 
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Bernie

I am going to use this, though I will have to look up saddle oxford.

Thanks
Siva


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 Post subject: Re: The Convent School
PostPosted: 13 May 2018, 10:51 
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common shoe worn by junior and senior high school girls.


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 Post subject: Re: The Convent School
PostPosted: 13 May 2018, 13:43 
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B

Now I am thinking of that one line which will elevate this to the level of a poem.

S


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