Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
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Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
Because when the boys said
"bee stings", the venom
made a home for itself.
I could not keep their
hands off of me.
Thirteen, the first time: Omerta.
A blood oath. I should have cut
his nuts off and wore
them like a pair of earrings.
Because if that's all they want me for
I'll make 'em not want me.
I'm invisible to men at this weight.
I dont care if my husband minds.
He's a scrawny little bastard.
Besides I could have married
the fool from that other poem
who jumps candles.
"bee stings", the venom
made a home for itself.
I could not keep their
hands off of me.
Thirteen, the first time: Omerta.
A blood oath. I should have cut
his nuts off and wore
them like a pair of earrings.
Because if that's all they want me for
I'll make 'em not want me.
I'm invisible to men at this weight.
I dont care if my husband minds.
He's a scrawny little bastard.
Besides I could have married
the fool from that other poem
who jumps candles.
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Re: Interview With Jack Sprat's Wife
Hi Kenneth,
good, creative persona-poem.
kinda recalls to me the wife of Bath
It's more a dramatic monologue(a la Browning) than an interview(Q & A)
^^ as the former, then title as "The Wife of Jack Sprat"
as the latter, then, "excerpt from an interview with Jack Sprat's Wife"
^^ I recommend the former, as the latter is too long - too wordy
However, moreover, (as just now, it occurs to me). don't mention Jack Sprat's Wife in the title; let the reader discover the subject from the voice/persona -
and as such, for a title: "from an interview"
^^ the reader is initially engaged to find out: an interview w/ whom?
Michael (MV)
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I like the narrator's strong voice...no wilting flower here...but I don't get the bee stings reference....I'm probably just not aware...
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I like the originality of a poem about a fable.
Jack Spratt would eat no fat
his wife would eat no lean
and so between the both you see
they wiped the platter clean.
I too missed the significance of the bee stings.
I admire that you can make such original work from meagre sources
Jonah, Adam and Eve and now fairy stories.
Jack Spratt would eat no fat
his wife would eat no lean
and so between the both you see
they wiped the platter clean.
I too missed the significance of the bee stings.
I admire that you can make such original work from meagre sources
Jonah, Adam and Eve and now fairy stories.
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"Bee stings" is a derogatory term to denote the budding of a prepubescent female's nammaries.
Its effect is a kind of sexual shaming.
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Its effect is a kind of sexual shaming.
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ok, it makes sense now....good one
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Fascinating poem, Kenneth. I feel like it has so many layers. Read it a few times and it felt different each time.Kenneth2816 wrote: ↑05 Sep 2018, 14:35"Bee stings" are anti snoring devices term to denote the budding of a prepubescent female's nammaries.
Its effect is a kind of sexual shaming.
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This strong, defiant woman who faces sexual assault is a memorable one....I would like to see her in more poems, just as I would like to see more Cuban poems....
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Arc, thank you.
Bob I like her too. Pretty sure she will be heard from again ( if I survive hurricane Florence
Bob I like her too. Pretty sure she will be heard from again ( if I survive hurricane Florence
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Where do you live?
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North Carolina
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Ah, I have a cousin who lives there....lives near Asheville....do you need to evacuate?
I lived through one hurricane as a kid...power was out for over a week...winds so strong the rain passed through our walls...roofs sliding forward like tipped hats...shingles flying off like startled birds....neighbors grilling afterwards in the streets...as a kid it was a lot more fun than it was for the grown-ups...may you pass through the storm safely...and write a poem about it
I lived through one hurricane as a kid...power was out for over a week...winds so strong the rain passed through our walls...roofs sliding forward like tipped hats...shingles flying off like startled birds....neighbors grilling afterwards in the streets...as a kid it was a lot more fun than it was for the grown-ups...may you pass through the storm safely...and write a poem about it
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I live near Asheville too. I think we may be ok