Muni
Muni
Vivid in memory
Muni pinches me
through the day,
while in Kindergarten.
She has sharp nails,
plunges them into the skin
till my arm turns red.
Excruciating.
My eyes glisten with tears.
Callous, shows
her incisive nails with pride.
Quieter I become.
I do not complain
nor warn her, out of fear.
Mysterious of her. Stops,
pinches no more,
Muni takes to medicine,
injects and dissects with precision
an extension of pinching.
I presume.
A leading surgeon in town-
Muni,- a celebrity. Practises
amidst fanfare and applause.
I admire her in silence.
Muni pinches me
through the day,
while in Kindergarten.
She has sharp nails,
plunges them into the skin
till my arm turns red.
Excruciating.
My eyes glisten with tears.
Callous, shows
her incisive nails with pride.
Quieter I become.
I do not complain
nor warn her, out of fear.
Mysterious of her. Stops,
pinches no more,
Muni takes to medicine,
injects and dissects with precision
an extension of pinching.
I presume.
A leading surgeon in town-
Muni,- a celebrity. Practises
amidst fanfare and applause.
I admire her in silence.
meenas17
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Re: Muni
Oh this is good! One of your best... the unusual Muni character is intriguing... terrific writing
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Re: Muni
Intriguing
is the word. Nice .
is the word. Nice .
Re: Muni
A Fascinating poem, Meena!
Vivid in memory
Muni pinches me
through the day,
while in Kindergarten.
A vivid memory indeed
She has sharp nails,
plunges them into the skin
till my arm turns red.
Excruciating.
My eyes glisten with tears.
Callous, shows
her incisive nails with pride.
Quieter I become.
I do not complain
nor warn her, out of fear.
Mysterious of her. Stops,
pinches no more,
Perhaps -
Mysteriously, she stops,
pinches no more
Muni takes to medicine,
injects and dissects with precision
an extension of pinching.
I presume.
A leading surgeon in town-
Muni,- a celebrity. Practises
amidst fanfare and applause.
I admire her in silence.
Quite an unexpected ending and a very original poem. Meena
Eira
Vivid in memory
Muni pinches me
through the day,
while in Kindergarten.
A vivid memory indeed
She has sharp nails,
plunges them into the skin
till my arm turns red.
Excruciating.
My eyes glisten with tears.
Callous, shows
her incisive nails with pride.
Quieter I become.
I do not complain
nor warn her, out of fear.
Mysterious of her. Stops,
pinches no more,
Perhaps -
Mysteriously, she stops,
pinches no more
Muni takes to medicine,
injects and dissects with precision
an extension of pinching.
I presume.
A leading surgeon in town-
Muni,- a celebrity. Practises
amidst fanfare and applause.
I admire her in silence.
Quite an unexpected ending and a very original poem. Meena
Eira
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- Posts: 1988
- Joined: 02 Mar 2016, 18:07
- Location: Between the mountains and the sea
Re: Muni
Suggested edits
throughout the day s1
into my skin s2
she shows s3
mysteriously she stop pinching,
no more pain. s4
Your writing is growing keep going.
best wishes.
throughout the day s1
into my skin s2
she shows s3
mysteriously she stop pinching,
no more pain. s4
Your writing is growing keep going.
best wishes.