déjà vu" (so it must be true)
-
- Posts: 2154
- Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57
déjà vu" (so it must be true)
“She looks a lot
like Lana Turner,” they say
about the strawberry blonde -
a post-Depression 40's teen
also working the fountain in a drug store
not far from the high school.
May's double feature: The Sunday following
Mother’s Day celebrates her birthday.
I play the earlybird,
offer to carry her to brunch,
but she prefers to nest
more in the recliner I got her
this time yester-year. She decides:
"We'll buffet this evening(besides,
this gives a widow more time
to ready for close-ups)."
The satellite's been on the blink -
a b&w static from the set.
I power-on the big screen
checking to see if TCM is back up.
Indeed, as I told her
the night before it would be.
She's even further delighted
the feature's about one of her idols -
a docu-memoire by the star’s only child
many years later. I put my coffee and the PC
on hold, and I, too, recall pictures
of my mother in her sweater-days.
Some things arthritis can
not stop or even slow down -
like the synergy of my hunch
and her flash back in UniSon:
"Mama, they used to tell you
you look like her."
Unexpectedly zoned-in
from her daydream: "How did you
know that?" Perked up
& pain-free without Rx,
she rewinds & vividly plays back
select sound bites remembered from silent dialog -
people still complimenting her
movie-star complexion
& gone-with-the-wind figure
passing from
but never through
with
a great grandmother
unknowingly out-phasing the moon
With the breath of our relish for charmed hours:
"Well, since we're just at 9,
and you are fully awake now,
how about we set to roll for a matinee lunch?"
"No, it'll take longer than that for me.
You run along til closer to 5."
Like her mother would say:
"Michael, go play til I call you in for supper."
Preparing me for when God calls me in
(Here comes the son) to find them
expecting me There too in Our Father's nursery - from maternity to Eternity
what really happens on earth
doesn't stay on earth (to Thy kingdom come)
Until then, motion-picture hours
granted to record rehearsal takes -
How they're called Golden Years
re-animated in technicolor & CGI
Vintage bubbling up from the cellar
the taste of the finest champagne,
like only humans are apt to
not take a last breath
but the Vision of the Haven of the Humane
so absolutely starstruck
The Lord takes our breath away
to always a wonder never a winter land
(Spirit move me) not on a carpet, but by receiving
the Miracle Lift from the finale to the Premiere
-
- Posts: 1988
- Joined: 02 Mar 2016, 18:07
- Location: Between the mountains and the sea
Re: déjà vu" (so it must be true)
Quite different to your usual short byte poems Michael,
refreshingly so, not that I don't like them.
A picture of caring for an elderly parent told
in a fun way, humouring the parent
with a little vanity, kindly, caring.
Woven through at the end thoughts of the infinite
the Divine Being.
I like the:
Very well done.
refreshingly so, not that I don't like them.
A picture of caring for an elderly parent told
in a fun way, humouring the parent
with a little vanity, kindly, caring.
Woven through at the end thoughts of the infinite
the Divine Being.
I like the:
and& gone-with-the-wind figure
I like very much the metaphor in:movie-star complexion
Thy Kingdom come or They kingdom come?"Michael, go play til I call you in for supper."
Very well done.
-
- Posts: 2692
- Joined: 03 Jun 2016, 21:03
Re: déjà vu" (so it must be true)
I agree... the warmth and humor appeal greatly.
A couple lines feel as if the N is trying too hard, especially the 2nd line:
unknowingly out-phasing the moon
With the breath of our relish for charmed hours:
These lines have a totally different feel to them, and imho are awkward... I would remove them, and come up with a simpler segue
Preparing me for when God
will call me in to find them
expecting me There too (Here comes the son)
in Our Father's nursery
What really happens on earth
doesn't stay on earth (to They kingdom come)
Overall, good work.... readers will enjoy this... keep them coming, Michael
A couple lines feel as if the N is trying too hard, especially the 2nd line:
unknowingly out-phasing the moon
With the breath of our relish for charmed hours:
These lines have a totally different feel to them, and imho are awkward... I would remove them, and come up with a simpler segue
Preparing me for when God
will call me in to find them
expecting me There too (Here comes the son)
in Our Father's nursery
What really happens on earth
doesn't stay on earth (to They kingdom come)
Overall, good work.... readers will enjoy this... keep them coming, Michael
Re: déjà vu" (so it must be true)
Nice to see a long poem from you Michael.
Could have been simpler.
Could have been simpler.
meenas17