Hank

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Kenneth2816
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Hank

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 09 Oct 2019, 06:02

Soon as I took a stool
I saw her push her way
across the bar straight at me.

I downed another Dewar's.
Her face was alright but her
ass rode high on her lower back

like an overweight jockey
clenching his knees.
They say you are a poet, she said.

Little bit, I nod, little bit.
Well go ahead then. Do it.
Speak something in poetry to me.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Hank

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 09 Oct 2019, 08:53

A fun slice of life you have here...love the jockey image....good ending

Kenneth2816
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Re: Hank

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 09 Oct 2019, 10:56

Thanks Bob. It's a poke at Bukowski

meenas17
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Re: Hank

#4 Post by meenas17 » 09 Oct 2019, 16:11

Enjoyed the humour.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: Hank

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 09 Oct 2019, 19:47

Ok, I can see that....I like some of his poems...one especially

Kenneth2816
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Re: Hank

#6 Post by Kenneth2816 » 09 Oct 2019, 22:15

Ty Meenas

Michael (MV)
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Re: Hank

#7 Post by Michael (MV) » 10 Oct 2019, 16:09

The Buk of L.A.

but then there is no other Buk

https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/50518.The_Buk_Book


😎

Michael (MV)

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