Man on Moon
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Man on Moon
Man on Moon
How I've longed to be that woman
folded within a man's arms
that I always see at an airport.
Others sweep by like water
past a creek's stone.
I stop and watch.
My arms hold the emptiness
of a sleepwalker
as I gaze at the moon
and wonder about the astronaut
shuffling across its chalky surface,
glancing down at the light
in my bedroom.
Who am I kidding?
Is love just a fantasy?
I’m a woman as plain
as a wall stripped of its paint.
He’s famous. Handsome.
Who then?
All that I long for
is the most common of lives—
to be loved, to be a wife,
a baby tethered inside me.
Why look to the moon
for answers?
I'm as lonely as Pluto,
having waited years
for a lover’s approach.
I imagine his heated entry,
his shuddering descent
my nerves trembling,
my world finally
discovered.
How I've longed to be that woman
folded within a man's arms
that I always see at an airport.
Others sweep by like water
past a creek's stone.
I stop and watch.
My arms hold the emptiness
of a sleepwalker
as I gaze at the moon
and wonder about the astronaut
shuffling across its chalky surface,
glancing down at the light
in my bedroom.
Who am I kidding?
Is love just a fantasy?
I’m a woman as plain
as a wall stripped of its paint.
He’s famous. Handsome.
Who then?
All that I long for
is the most common of lives—
to be loved, to be a wife,
a baby tethered inside me.
Why look to the moon
for answers?
I'm as lonely as Pluto,
having waited years
for a lover’s approach.
I imagine his heated entry,
his shuddering descent
my nerves trembling,
my world finally
discovered.
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Re: Man on Moon
Hi Bob,
I'm hearing & seeing the finale as:
my nerves trembling,
my world finally
discovered
Michael (MV)
I'm hearing & seeing the finale as:
my nerves trembling,
my world finally
discovered
Michael (MV)
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Re: Man on Moon
Thx, Michael.... discovered it is
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Re: Man on Moon
Bob
This time also,I missed the first draft.
Siva
This time also,I missed the first draft.
Siva
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Re: Man on Moon
The only difference is that the first version ended on "shared" instead of "discovered". Let me know which you prefer, shared or discovered, as the last line.
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Re: Man on Moon
To 'discover' is like 'creation' itself, a whole world out there,inviting.
Compared to this,'shared' is a milk and water word,it does not 'vibrate.'
Compared to this,'shared' is a milk and water word,it does not 'vibrate.'
Re: Man on Moon
Thumbs up to discovered at the end - share would have a different intent.
Eira
Eira