For Your Love
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For Your Love
For Your Love
From the stroller you lift
your arms toward me
as if you’re merely stretching
after a long nap,
but when Grandma appears
you giggle! My jealousy
leapfrogs over reason
as she takes you
into her arms
as if you were a bouquet
of long stemmed
peonies.
Oh my little one, how
can I steal your love
from Grandma?
When she burrows her head
into your belly
you squeal with delight
but when I do the same?
You are as poker faced
as a tortoise.
Ashlyn, don’t I love you
more than anyone, even more
than Elvis or Keats?
What I wouldn’t give—
my stocks, my red sports car,
my season tickets to the Giants—
to be loved like Grandma,
to have you light up
like a firefly
in love
From the stroller you lift
your arms toward me
as if you’re merely stretching
after a long nap,
but when Grandma appears
you giggle! My jealousy
leapfrogs over reason
as she takes you
into her arms
as if you were a bouquet
of long stemmed
peonies.
Oh my little one, how
can I steal your love
from Grandma?
When she burrows her head
into your belly
you squeal with delight
but when I do the same?
You are as poker faced
as a tortoise.
Ashlyn, don’t I love you
more than anyone, even more
than Elvis or Keats?
What I wouldn’t give—
my stocks, my red sports car,
my season tickets to the Giants—
to be loved like Grandma,
to have you light up
like a firefly
in love
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Re: For Your Love
The poem works well. Do you need the last line?
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Re: For Your Love
It’s a good question, Siva. Now that you raise it, I’m not sure.
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Re: For Your Love
I will google and see if fireflies light up,only in love.Is it to attract the opposite sex? I have seen porcupines shoot up their quills,like peacocks their feathers.
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Re: For Your Love
I will google and see if fireflies light up,only in love.Is it to attract the opposite sex? I have seen porcupines shoot up their quills,like peacocks their feathers.
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Re: For Your Love
It's to signal to attract the bachelors. Do fireflies experience anything like love? Who knows?
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Re: For Your Love
So which firefly lights up,the male or female? If it is to signal the bachelors then it must be the female.
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Re: For Your Love
Interesting, Bob,
a paternal pining for the affection of his daughter
I believe the narrator maybe doesn't understand that there is a grandmother-grandchild love and there is a parent-child love.
Each rapport is unique equal with different expression. It's like men aren't invited & attend bridal & baby showers.
The granddaughter is going to respond to grandmother in expressions reserved for grandmother; and to the father, with expressions just for daddy.
last line not needed - the firefly finale is fine & fitting
and gives me lyrical cause to link & share to this buried treasure: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X8tmdrQ7Ri8
Thanks, Bob, I do like the brave expression of this broem,
Michael (MV)
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Re: For Your Love
Thx, Michael... enjoyed the link
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Re: For Your Love
Highlighting this broem
to honor Bob
this Father's Day.
How wonder -
(serendipitous:
poetic coincidence) -
if the IBPC results
were announced on this Sunday
and Bob's father & child poem
appeared on the winner's list.
Bob, without thinking about it,
sunrise inspired me to make this move and compose this prose-poem:
Our Father's instrumental
through me to celebrate the occasion
(Michael's keeping this Sabbath
sacred as only he is able,
born to be just brother-son
never to sire)
Bob, Thank you sharing
your creativity & constructive workshop.
Thank you, too, for bringing IBPC honors
home to the Writer's Block.
Sincerely in the spirit of creativity,
Michael (MV)
to honor Bob
this Father's Day.
How wonder -
(serendipitous:
poetic coincidence) -
if the IBPC results
were announced on this Sunday
and Bob's father & child poem
appeared on the winner's list.
Bob, without thinking about it,
sunrise inspired me to make this move and compose this prose-poem:
Our Father's instrumental
through me to celebrate the occasion
(Michael's keeping this Sabbath
sacred as only he is able,
born to be just brother-son
never to sire)
Bob, Thank you sharing
your creativity & constructive workshop.
Thank you, too, for bringing IBPC honors
home to the Writer's Block.
Sincerely in the spirit of creativity,
Michael (MV)
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Re: For Your Love
Thanks, Michael. You’re very generous and always have been. Mucho gracias