Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

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Bernie01
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Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

#1 Post by Bernie01 » 14 May 2018, 09:56

I see your photograph in a magazine,
wistful as a heavy girl in high school,
violet parasol blown sideways
in the Zephyr wind, a rainy languor
as you read the iris-white pages
of the Osaka Shinbun news,
metal glasses like the goggles
of an Imperial pilot sighting
American carriers for the first time.

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 14 May 2018, 12:29

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Good snapshot poem.What about 'I see' which will have more impact?

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BobBradshaw
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Re: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 14 May 2018, 18:38

Another gem... lovely images handled with deft understatement

Kenneth2816
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Re: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 15 May 2018, 01:07

Very nice. Love the muted reference of 12/41

Bernie01
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Re: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

#5 Post by Bernie01 » 17 May 2018, 01:02

La Wally---two versions:

Maria Callas---

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fJKpYnMMKKM


and from French big ht film, Diva:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fJKpYnMMKKM


"...then I will go away...as far as the echo from the church bell...


and here, the woman that inspired my Japanese umbrella lady.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ak3DWrfVHIU

2008

FranktheFrank
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Re: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941

#6 Post by FranktheFrank » 18 May 2018, 22:27

Great poem.
What else to say.

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