Christmas Cactus

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capricorn
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Christmas Cactus

#1 Post by capricorn » 16 Mar 2019, 18:06

Christmas Cactus

She faded at Yuletide
- left me orphaned.
I adopted her favourite cactus,
brought to cheer her
in the dreary ward,
took it home to nourish.

Trapped in mourning’s rut,
I neglected it.
Grief eased; I found the plant
desiccated, like my core.

Wilted with guilt
I teased encrusted roots
from sapless earth,
pampered it with fresh soil,
water and kindness.

To my surprise, cerise buds
now tip verdant leaves.
It's almost Spring, yet
her Christmas Cactus blooms.

An old one, once published, but the journal has now closed

Michael (MV)
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Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: Christmas Cactus

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 17 Mar 2019, 06:13

Belated Congrats, Eira

Not surprised it was published

I like how the plant parallels the person

And I like the finale, which is without end

I have always felt Spring to be the fulfillment of the Christmas promise

"It is done"


Music-video to celebrate -

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=98LaApCB4l8

😎

Michael (MV)


capricorn wrote:
16 Mar 2019, 18:06
Christmas Cactus

She faded at Yuletide
- left me orphaned.
I adopted her favourite cactus,
brought to cheer her
in the dreary ward,
took it home to nourish.

Trapped in mourning’s rut,
I neglected it.
Grief eased; I found the plant
desiccated, like my core.

Wilted with guilt
I teased encrusted roots
from sapless earth,
pampered it with fresh soil,
water and kindness.

To my surprise, cerise buds
now tip verdant leaves.
It's almost Spring, yet
her Christmas Cactus blooms.

An old one, once published, but the journal has now closed



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Billy
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Joined: 22 Jun 2006, 10:56

Re: Christmas Cactus

#3 Post by Billy » 18 Mar 2019, 17:07

very good poem with a nicely understated message.

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