Christmas Cactus

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capricorn
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Christmas Cactus

#1 Post by capricorn » 16 Mar 2019, 18:06

Christmas Cactus

She faded at Yuletide
- left me orphaned.
I adopted her favourite cactus,
brought to cheer her
in the dreary ward,
took it home to nourish.

Trapped in mourning’s rut,
I neglected it.
Grief eased; I found the plant
desiccated, like my core.

Wilted with guilt
I teased encrusted roots
from sapless earth,
pampered it with fresh soil,
water and kindness.

To my surprise, cerise buds
now tip verdant leaves.
It's almost Spring, yet
her Christmas Cactus blooms.

An old one, once published, but the journal has now closed

Michael (MV)
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Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: Christmas Cactus

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 17 Mar 2019, 06:13

Belated Congrats, Eira

Not surprised it was published

I like how the plant parallels the person

And I like the finale, which is without end

I have always felt Spring to be the fulfillment of the Christmas promise

"It is done"


Music-video to celebrate -

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=98LaApCB4l8

😎

Michael (MV)


capricorn wrote:
16 Mar 2019, 18:06
Christmas Cactus

She faded at Yuletide
- left me orphaned.
I adopted her favourite cactus,
brought to cheer her
in the dreary ward,
took it home to nourish.

Trapped in mourning’s rut,
I neglected it.
Grief eased; I found the plant
desiccated, like my core.

Wilted with guilt
I teased encrusted roots
from sapless earth,
pampered it with fresh soil,
water and kindness.

To my surprise, cerise buds
now tip verdant leaves.
It's almost Spring, yet
her Christmas Cactus blooms.

An old one, once published, but the journal has now closed



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Billy
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Re: Christmas Cactus

#3 Post by Billy » 18 Mar 2019, 17:07

very good poem with a nicely understated message.

capricorn
Posts: 237
Joined: 21 Sep 2017, 23:23

Re: Christmas Cactus

#4 Post by capricorn » 28 Mar 2019, 03:04

Michael (MV) wrote:
17 Mar 2019, 06:13
Belated Congrats, Eira

Not surprised it was published

I like how the plant parallels the person

And I like the finale, which is without end

I have always felt Spring to be the fulfillment of the Christmas promise

"It is done"


Music-video to celebrate -

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=98LaApCB4l8

😎

Michael (MV)


Thanks for your comments Michael and the lovely video. Interesting thought that spring is the fulfilment of the Christmas promise - how true!

I'm glad you feel this is done. I have a number poems that were published in this journal over the years, before it closed and I am working through them with a view to submitting elsewhere now. Eternal Peacock is one of them, which needed quite a lot of work and I am grateful for all the workshopping help received here at WB.

Eira



capricorn wrote:
16 Mar 2019, 18:06
Christmas Cactus

She faded at Yuletide
- left me orphaned.
I adopted her favourite cactus,
brought to cheer her
in the dreary ward,
took it home to nourish.

Trapped in mourning’s rut,
I neglected it.
Grief eased; I found the plant
desiccated, like my core.

Wilted with guilt
I teased encrusted roots
from sapless earth,
pampered it with fresh soil,
water and kindness.

To my surprise, cerise buds
now tip verdant leaves.
It's almost Spring, yet
her Christmas Cactus blooms.

An old one, once published, but the journal has now closed



capricorn
Posts: 237
Joined: 21 Sep 2017, 23:23

Re: Christmas Cactus

#5 Post by capricorn » 28 Mar 2019, 03:06

Billy wrote:
18 Mar 2019, 17:07
very good poem with a nicely understated message.
Thanks Billy

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