Haiku - Bulimia Nervosa

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Kenneth2816
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Haiku - Bulimia Nervosa

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 15 May 2019, 14:45

If church candle thick
or thin as an unstruck match,
burned child craves the flame.

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#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 16 May 2019, 00:24

Terrific closing line...
Do you mean “unstruck”?

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#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 16 May 2019, 00:52

Shit. Yes unstruck. Should have caught that

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#4 Post by meenas17 » 16 May 2019, 11:54

Bulima Nervosa is an eating disorder. Is it not?
Terrific lines.Ken.
meenas17

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#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 16 May 2019, 14:44

It is Meenas, affecting mostly women

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#6 Post by Michael (MV) » 17 May 2019, 00:46

 
Hi Kenneth,

not all 3-line micro-poems are haiku-poems: It's not the fulfillment & distribution of of a 5/7/5 syllabic count that makes a haiku, esp in English.
Besides, the poem is not the form; the form is not the poem: the form is in service to the poem.


Haiku is one breath. This example by Nick Virgilio:

bass
picking bugs
off the moon


Haiku are usually free of literary devices such as simile: "thin as an unstruck match,"


Yours is a micro-poem, with characteristics of the Metaphysical(Baroque) Poets.(and maybe I will speak of it as a metaphysical micro-poem at a later sitting)

It's alright that it isn't a haiku-poem - it's just that not all micro-poems are haiku.


You might possibly filter out a poem of haiku aesthetics.

Here's the most comprehensive link I know of: https://www.thehaikufoundation.org/



Also, Haiku isn't titled - top-heavy.

If a poem, of any length, is a tip of the iceberg - then a haiku-poem is a tip of the tip.


in the spirit of creativity

8)

Michael (MV)

 

 

 
 

Kenneth2816
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#7 Post by Kenneth2816 » 17 May 2019, 07:00

I've never truly been a fan of the form . Thanks for the elucidation. I'll be sticking to free verse 🎈

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#8 Post by capricorn » 17 May 2019, 15:55

A great mini poem, Ken although I agree with Michael about it not being a haiku because of the use of simile. Good read all the same.

Eira

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#9 Post by Kenneth2816 » 18 May 2019, 05:19

Thanks Eira it was my first attempt a5 Haiku

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