The Worst Things About You

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BobBradshaw
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The Worst Things About You

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 28 May 2019, 01:33

The Worst Things About You

The worst things about you? You love babies
and huskies, dalmatians, wiener dogs,
anything attached to a lovely woman
with thin wrists,
and you love the best restaurants,
the waiters bringing you vintage wines
as if you were the food critic
for the New York Times
while we wait outside by the food truck,
wolfing down their cheapest burritos
and you love driving your sports car,
whizzing by our rusting station wagons
as if they were street sweepers
pushing your debris
from last night's party up the street,
and you love to cook in your penthouse
with the Manhattan skyline,
where your souffles never fall
and where you sport a new fiancee
every six months,
and you love skiing
the highest slopes in Tahoe
while I shiver in my small apartment
and you love the latest
electronic gadgets from Asia
and you love flying
in your personal jet to San Francisco
for a rock concert in Golden Gate Park,
but what you love most
are the pals you knew in high school
that you keep contact with,
through emails and texts,
witnesses to your
life.

Kenneth2816
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 28 May 2019, 05:42

I do not like this person, whoever they are. In that , the poem succeeds. Strong

meenas17
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#3 Post by meenas17 » 01 Jun 2019, 20:09

There are two sides of everything.
Bob, you have portrayed the worst side in a best way.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 02 Jun 2019, 00:54

Meenas, Ken —. Glad you enjoyed it

FranktheFrank
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#5 Post by FranktheFrank » 02 Jun 2019, 16:07

I enjoyed this Bob, it reminds me of a song from the 70's
Where Do You Go To (My Lovely)
Peter Sarstedt
You talk like Marlene Dietrich
And you dance like Zizi Jeanmaire
Your clothes are all made by Balmain
And there's diamonds and pearls in your hair, yes there are
You live in a fancy apartment
Off the Boulevard Saint-Michel
Where you keep your Rolling Stones records
And a friend of Sacha Distel, yes you do
But where do you go to my lovely
When you're alone in your bed
Tell me the thoughts that surround you
I want to look inside your head, yes I do
I've seen all your qualifications
You got from the Sorbonne
And the painting you stole from Picasso
Your loveliness goes on and on, yes it does
When you go on your summer vacation
You go to Juan-les-Pins
With your carefully designed topless swimsuit
You get an even suntan on your back and on your legs
And when the snow falls you're found in Saint Moritz
With the others of the jet-set
And you sip your Napoleon brandy
But you never get your lips wet, no you don't
But where do you go to my lovely
When you're alone in your bed
Won't you tell me the thoughts that surround you
I want to look inside your head, yes I do
Your name, it is heard in high places
You know the Aga Khan
He sent you a racehorse for Christmas
And you keep it just for fun, for a laugh a-ha-ha-ha
They say that when you get married
It'll be to a millionaire
But they don't realize where you came from
And I wonder if they really care, or give a damn
Where do you go to my lovely
When you're alone in your bed
Tell me the thoughts that surround you
I want to look inside your head, yes I do
I remember the back streets of Naples
Two children begging in rags
Both touched with a burning ambition
To shake off their lowly-born tags, so they try
So look into my face Marie-Claire
And remember just who you are
Then go and forget me forever
But I know you still bear the scar, deep inside, yes you do
I know where you go to my lovely
When you're alone in your bed
I know the thoughts that surround you
'Cause I can look inside your head
(na na-na-na na na-na-na na-na na na na na)
(na na-na-na na na-na-na na-na na na na na)
Songwriters: PETER SARSTEDT
© Sony/ATV Music Publishing LLC
For non-commercial use only.

BobBradshaw
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#6 Post by BobBradshaw » 03 Jun 2019, 03:10

I don’t know this song but thx. for sharing it....I. Will look it up

BobBradshaw
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#7 Post by BobBradshaw » 04 Jun 2019, 00:00

I just listened to this song, Frank, on Youtube... enjoyed... thx for mentioning it

FranktheFrank
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Re: The Worst Things About You

#8 Post by FranktheFrank » 04 Jun 2019, 00:29

:)

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