Never Forget - V2

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Never Forget - V2

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 04 Jun 2019, 14:15

Never Forget This Man

British Hero I’ll Never Forget
Rex North, A British Hero I’ll Never Forget,
War Correspondent, Daily Mail Friday, June 9. 1944
From Aboard Her Majesty's Ship Belfast

This is a story about of the magnificent spirit
and endurance of our men in France.

We were off the French coast, blasting enemy tanks
and silencing the heavy guns, when a tiny boat drew

alongside. ‘Will you take an injured man on board?’
We lowered a draw from a large cupboard on the end

of a crane. The sea was white-tipped, angry and rough.
The boat sank into the trough between the waves,

while the man was bleeding profusely. later he lay
on deck a cigarette between his lips, his eyes open,

watching, but still smiling. ‘Bad luck old man,’ I said.
He returned a tight smile. That night his legs

were amputated. Sadly, he died. Please remember
this man's tremendous courage, patience and will.

The ordinary people of this country, like him,
have written history in crimson-shed blood.


******

Here is a story that brings home something
of the magnificent spirit and endurance of our
men in France.

We were just off the French coast, blasting their tanks
and armoured vehicles and silencing the heavy guns,
when a tiny boat drew alongside. ‘Will you take an
injured man on board?’
we were asked.
We lowered a draw from a large cupboard on the end
of a crane. The sea was white-tipped, angry and rough.
The small craft was being heaved nose-first into the air.
Every time they reached for the makeshift stretcher, the
boat sank into the trough between the waves, and all
the while the man was bleeding profusely because part
of his leg had been blown away when his landing craft
struck a mine.
He lay on that deck, a cigarette between his lips, his
eyes open, watching
and wondering whether the stretcher
would dash him in the face, but he was still smiling.
Slowly we brought him up. ‘Bad luck old man,’ I said.
He
just smiled in return. He could not speak. Later,
just before his legs were amputated, he said that for three
years he had been in the army training, training
and training some more. For three years he had been
trained for D-Day – and now this had happened.
That night he died.
I will always remember this man because his courage,
patience and will were tremendous.

Throughout this week, I have been impressed
by the ordinary people of this country who have written
history with their blood.


*****

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Re: Never Forget - V2

#2 Post by FranktheFrank » 06 Jun 2019, 12:57

version 2 Thurs. 6th June 2019

BobBradshaw
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Re: Never Forget - V2

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 07 Jun 2019, 00:02

Pretty well done exercise.... the ending needs to be stronger, the history written in blood too common.... just curious, why are you doing this type of exercise? You have a good, imaginative voice which interests me more

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Re: Never Forget - V2

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 07 Jun 2019, 17:19

hi bob, the daily mail is printing copies of it's new of D-day landings of 75 years ago.
every day they print 4 pages of news from the invasion front. my three fold reasons
1. to commemorate the landings of the allied armies, usa, uk and Canada
2. to give American readers a taste of how the brits handled reporting of the war
3. to give me practice of found and erasure type poems

please excuse lack of caps.

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Re: Never Forget - V2

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 07 Jun 2019, 19:56

We can't praise that generation enough...they saved Europe. Out of curiosity, who publishes found / erasure poems? Personally, I don't get the attraction, but I have never been a big fan of collage either. Or Slam Poetry for that matter. But that's me. And it isn't a criticism of you or anyone else who writes "found" poetry. It's your right....Since it has become rather big at W, I am just curious about why it's popular.

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Re: Never Forget - V2

#6 Post by FranktheFrank » 07 Jun 2019, 21:05

i agree bob, i don't like most of the collage stuff
the way i do it is to leave the original text in feint
i can't do that here, the system does not allow.
and it is very limiting, but for historical work
it seems to work for me. i am only recently getting to grips with it
and it is allowable to add key words and change for grammar
to meet the need. it really is about enhancing prose
so the work approaches the poetic set. to me it should
bring historical writing to the fore where an author has
inadvertently written prose that approaches the beauty of poetic.

i think it truly works in historical reports where the author is dead,
not necessarily dead, so that his work is glorified in a new form
so as to elevate his work. hope that all makes sense.

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Re: Never Forget - V2

#7 Post by BobBradshaw » 07 Jun 2019, 21:13

Thanks, Frank...I like how you have thought this out

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Re: Never Forget - V2

#8 Post by FranktheFrank » 18 Jun 2019, 07:10

you're welcome bob

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