Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Groom's Parents’ House.

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SivaRamanathan
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Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Groom's Parents’ House.

#1 Post by SivaRamanathan » 09 Jun 2019, 14:35

The partitioned Madras Terrace house
with no concept of attached bathrooms

was alright for a family of three, but when
the boy was to get married,the house received a face lift;

a store room was transformed to the bath room
adjacent to the bedroom.

The girl’s family had insisted on an attached bath
and not one of those hollow rooms.

The father ruminated, now that there is a bedroom
with an attached bath and the boy has also waited

for thirty two years, he said ,'yes' to the friends of friends,
‘let them come.’ And they came to 'see' the bride.

From the bride's side they saw the path leading to the house
taking hordes of relatives, they saw for themselves

that there are trees that keep you cool, specially the neem
and many many ancient trees.

there was also the sea breeze
which carries the salt spray.

I have heard how important mirrors are to a bedroom,
but an attached bathroom? The marriage got fixed.

The daughter-in-law entered the small and neat
kitchen. She wondered if the tavas and pans of her dowry

would fit into this self sufficient kitchen, where the
liquid rice flour dough was stored to ferment, she had no clue.

Grandmother came in a wheel chair and she said ,‘
’how like her own mother’s house it looked:

I keep thinking how long will this old house stand
before changing shape, a pentagon room for the children,

perhaps. Instead,the girl, stayed back in her paternal house
and the boy came to live with her for ever after.

Kenneth2816
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#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Jun 2019, 04:11

I love this. I don't understand all the cultural nuances, bit it's witty, colloquial.

BobBradshaw
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#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 10 Jun 2019, 04:18

I agree... an excellent subject for a poem, and one that is handled well with gentleness and subtlety.

SivaRamanathan
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#4 Post by SivaRamanathan » 10 Jun 2019, 05:52

Thanks Kenneth and Bob for reading this.It has to be edited. I will edit it, but the incentive to edit comes only when I post it here.

FranktheFrank
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#5 Post by FranktheFrank » 11 Jun 2019, 14:47

Siva

some queries some suggestions for your perusal:

try groom for boy in title

storeroom was converted to a bathroom

hollow room?

many many, why not many many many, or just many

carries sea salted air or sprayed sea salted air

self sufficient kitchen?

how it looked like her mother's house


SivaRamanathan
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#7 Post by SivaRamanathan » 17 Jun 2019, 13:04

Frank

I saw this only now.will work on it.

Thank you

FranktheFrank
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Re: Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.

#8 Post by FranktheFrank » 17 Jun 2019, 14:28

you are welcome Siva

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