The Owl and the Blackbird

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The Owl and the Blackbird

#1 Post by capricorn » 22 Jul 2019, 02:54

The Owl and the Blackbird

It’s barely light when he stirs
joining the avian choir.
I cringe to hear his flutelike trill,
listen as he scuttles about.

Pulling our feather duvet up
over my head, I squint out,
see him strut, fully feathered,
crest still in disarray.

He zooms away, so I doze
until he flutters back
to peck my cool cheek
twittering Cup of tea luv

When twilight’s past, he flies
into our nest, soon fast
asleep, head under his wing.
I’m still wide awake

at midnight and perch beside him,
listening to the loud rattle
of stertorous breathing,
my feathers ruffled.

Wide eyed I swivel my head
from side to side,
knowing he won’t wake
even when I hoot!

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#2 Post by FranktheFrank » 22 Jul 2019, 15:43

Haha funny
enjoyed.

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#3 Post by meenas17 » 22 Jul 2019, 18:18

Lovely poem, Eira,
Great reading!
meenas17

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 23 Jul 2019, 05:52

Enchanting.

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 23 Jul 2019, 07:21

A fun poem... charmed

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#6 Post by capricorn » 11 Aug 2019, 02:49

FranktheFrank wrote:
22 Jul 2019, 15:43
Haha funny
enjoyed.
Sorry to be late answering - glad you enjoyed, Frank

Eira

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#7 Post by capricorn » 11 Aug 2019, 02:50

meenas17 wrote:
22 Jul 2019, 18:18
Lovely poem, Eira,
Great reading!
Thanks Meena!

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#8 Post by capricorn » 11 Aug 2019, 02:51

Kenneth2816 wrote:
23 Jul 2019, 05:52
Enchanting.
Thanks Ken :D

Eira

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#9 Post by capricorn » 11 Aug 2019, 02:52

BobBradshaw wrote:
23 Jul 2019, 07:21
A fun poem... charmed
Thanks Bob - enjoyed writing this one :D

Eira

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#10 Post by Billy » 11 Aug 2019, 07:17

Sweet. Can’t come up with anything to improve it. Good as is.

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Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

#11 Post by capricorn » 24 Aug 2019, 03:06

Billy wrote:
11 Aug 2019, 07:17
Sweet. Can’t come up with anything to improve it. Good as is.
Thanks Billy

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