Golden Triangle

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meenas17
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Golden Triangle

#1 Post by meenas17 » 06 Aug 2019, 16:22

A two month away
from the second home
back in the first
I feel relaxed. Do
some cleaning,
to restore grace

I think of the second,
just out of court,
update with phone calls,
a check periodical
nothing inf a taxation
work goes fine.

It is kind of having
two spouses, each one
in different countries,
and with that I meet
a third one, who
turns irresistible.

She is attractive
and demanding, Takes
the life out of me,
I am unable to cope
Wedded to her at
a ripe age I serve.

The premier, being a senior
turns joyful while the next
is resourceful, the last,
hopefully, do not wish
to commit once more, nags,
gnaws and prods.
I am done!
meenas17

Kenneth2816
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Joined: 01 Jun 2008, 09:17

Re: Golden Triangle

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 06 Aug 2019, 18:33

Very warm and inviting poem

BobBradshaw
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Re: Golden Triangle

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 06 Aug 2019, 20:19

Nicely done...love these lines:

I think of the second,
just out of court,
update with phone calls,
a check periodical
nothing inf a taxation
work goes fine.

It is kind of having
two spouses, each one
in different countries,
and with that I meet
a third one, who
turns irresistible.

She is attractive
and demanding, Takes
the life out of me,
I am unable to cope
Wedded to her at
a ripe age

Kenneth2816
Posts: 1178
Joined: 01 Jun 2008, 09:17

Re: Golden Triangle

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 07 Aug 2019, 01:20

Meenas you need to post your IBPC poem so Michael can send it

meenas17
Posts: 687
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Re: Golden Triangle

#5 Post by meenas17 » 10 Aug 2019, 09:29

Thanks, Ken and Bob.
An expression of the way I live.
meenas17

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