The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

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Billy
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The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

#1 Post by Billy » 11 Aug 2019, 07:15

The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

You don't seem to care
so I couldn't have startled you.

Who am I to send you packing?
You own this street, all the streets.

Did some little voice say skedaddle?
Are you black on the inside, too,

harboring a doomsday weltanschauung?
You wouldn't answer if you could.

I believe you know how the world
will settle out, your only hint, "Caw, Caw."

meenas17
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Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

#2 Post by meenas17 » 11 Aug 2019, 14:54

Your only hint, "Caw, Caw,"
haunts me.

The disrespect we show to the bird is well expressed.
meenas17

Kenneth2816
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Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Aug 2019, 15:38

Interesting take.

FranktheFrank
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Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

#4 Post by FranktheFrank » 11 Aug 2019, 16:23

Crows believe themselves to be superior to man. :)

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Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 11 Aug 2019, 20:14

Nice one

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Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

#6 Post by Billy » 12 Aug 2019, 23:39

Thanks meena kenneth bob frank

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