Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

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Kenneth2816
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Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Sep 2019, 07:54

When they pore through your archeology,
sift the cerebral landscape for clues
to the genesis of your heinousness
tell them this:

As a child, your favorite pull toy
was a mechanical puppy whose
tail was a spring, its
not-quite head screws in and out
like a light bulb, eyes goggle
back and forth with each
elliptic jerk, perfectly timed
to a metallic yip, yip,yip.

Sometimes you popped the arm
joints on your sister's Barbie
which doubled as battlefield casualty,
wounds graffitied on with
a red Magic Marker.

Then maybe they will think that's
when everything kicked off
instead of fifteen seconds after
the bell rang and the hallway
filled with fish and the last thing
everyone remembers is you
reaching into your locker,
motherfucker.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 10 Sep 2019, 19:12

Wow.... terrific and to say the least disquieting... well done!

Kenneth2816
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Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 10 Sep 2019, 20:36

You know how they akways interview the neighbors who say what a nice quiet boy he was. Then the forensic psychological profile. Some people are just fucking evil, petiod

Thanks for commenting

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Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 11 Sep 2019, 00:09

I have read a number of poems on shooters recently... this one is by far the best

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Re: Noteu 7 From the School Shooter's Therapist

#5 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Sep 2019, 02:48

I didn't know it was a genre, but am.not surprised..

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Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#6 Post by meenas17 » 11 Sep 2019, 10:18

Interesting read, Ken. The shooter playing with a toy, poking his sister's Barbie, all seem normal.
The shooting and the aftermath, terrible to go through, Ken.
meenas17

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Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#7 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Sep 2019, 15:00

Thank you Meensd

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Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist

#8 Post by Kenneth2816 » 11 Sep 2019, 17:35

This is an alternate version. I've never written a rant.


When they pore through your archeology,
sift the cerebral landscape for clues
to the genesis of your heinousness
tell them this:

As a child, your favorite pull toy
was a mechanical puppy whose
tail was a spring, its
not-quite head screws in and out
like a light bulb, eyes goggle
back and forth with each
elliptic jerk, perfectly timed
to a metallic yip, yip,yip.

Sometimes you popped the arm
joints on your sister's Barbie
which doubled as battlefield casualty,
wounds graffitied on with
a red Magic Marker.

Then maybe they will think that's
when everything kicked off,
& all the neighbors will
say what a quiet boy
& all the relatives will say
what a good boy

& all the politicians with their
best conservative ties and life-time
NRA membership lapel pins,
sandwiched between the chesty
blondes of Fox News will rail
against violent video games
& bullying & mental health& Prozac.

Cause nothing says Murican like
God & guns %chic-fil-a &
stand for the anthem;you
don't like it you can leave .

But instead , fifteen seconds after
the bell rang & the hallway
filled with fish, you were
envisioning all the Goth girls
who would send you lockets
of their hair & dark poems,

& the last thing everyone in
Ms.McGahas Ninth Grade Biology Class
remembers as you strode through
the door was how peaceful you looked
you sick fuck.

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