When They Make The Movie of Your Life

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When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#1 Post by judyt547 » 04 Nov 2019, 04:11

When They Make The Movie of Your Life

You open the mailbox
with a gesture
so commonplace
that only the sound of
high-pitched violins
would alert the audience
that a pivotal,
life-changing scene is about to
unfold. In the morning
after the return mail
has been sent--to the accompaniment
of more violins in a minor key--
your life, not yet visibly changed,
will move forward to the next scene,
the one with guitars.

BobBradshaw
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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 04 Nov 2019, 07:49

Lovely ending!

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#3 Post by judyt547 » 04 Nov 2019, 08:16

Thanks, Bob. While I was constructing this, I kept thinking
of the old Hitchcock movie, "39 Steps" and the way he used music
to set the scenes. It was a fascinating technique. So this is
a bit of tongue-in-cheek homage to that.

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#4 Post by Kenneth2816 » 04 Nov 2019, 14:40

Yeah this is clever. And like the use of music to heighten tension, the narrator doesn't give any details about her life. This is highly imaginative. Good job.

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#5 Post by FranktheFrank » 06 Nov 2019, 03:15

39 steps has been made several time
good film
when you think about it our lives are a number of film sets
and props and actors come and go all he time
Interesting concept.

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#6 Post by judyt547 » 06 Nov 2019, 04:01

Yep. good point. Ours is the full version, complete with surprise endings...=)

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#7 Post by BobBradshaw » 02 Dec 2019, 21:53

Judy, this poem has been nominated for the IBPC. Please post in Writer's Palaver if you accept or not. If you accept, please post the version there of the poem you want sent. Thx

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Re: When They Make The Movie of Your Life

#8 Post by judyt547 » 02 Dec 2019, 22:23

goodness. will do, and ty.

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