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by Billy
21 Mar 2024, 01:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Niight in Jail
Replies: 4
Views: 215

Re: Haibun

Is this better Bob?
by Billy
21 Mar 2024, 00:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Swing
Replies: 3
Views: 114

Re: Swing

Guilty until proven innocent, I guesss. This is a delightful poem. I loved the whole thing, but especially the first half. Yours isn't just telling like mine; it has poetry to it, lyricism, similes, just great.
by Billy
20 Mar 2024, 21:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Resisting Arrest in Warren, RI
Replies: 3
Views: 129

Re: Resisting Arrest in Warren, RI

Good, funny poem with a hint of universal frustration with injustice.

Your poem inspired me to post one of my run-ins with the law. I might post some other ones if I can find time to write at the moment.
by Billy
20 Mar 2024, 21:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Niight in Jail
Replies: 4
Views: 215

A Niight in Jail

A Night in Jail Leroy Truck, or Track, he used both as if it didn't matter which was right. Dad, a New Deal Democrat, picked him up off the streets, homeless, gave him a job and a place to live. Leroy had a widow's peak, hair slicked back like a forties crooner which was odd for a Lakota. Dad baile...
by Billy
19 Mar 2024, 17:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Blue Prayer Beads
Replies: 8
Views: 301

Re: Blue Prayer Beads

Thanks Bob for your enthusiasm and kind response.
Thanks Caleb
by Billy
17 Mar 2024, 17:30
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Blue Prayer Beads
Replies: 8
Views: 301

Blue Prayer Beads

Blue Prayer Beads 95 beads in total, a tassel of embroidery floss. 5 pewter beads separate the remaining 90 blue Dumortierite beads. A gift from my wife who's always there to save a drowning man. I say, "Allah’u’Abha", slide a bead left or right each count until I feel the tassel that’s like an art...
by Billy
15 Mar 2024, 04:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Narrow Fellow
Replies: 8
Views: 462

Re: A Narrow Fellow

As I said, I don’t come here a lot. I have another site I go to more.
Right now, I’m not posting much anywhere. Having trouble writing for the moment.
by Billy
14 Mar 2024, 21:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Narrow Fellow
Replies: 8
Views: 462

Re: A Narrow Fellow

I agree with Michael.

This is a clever and discerning poem. One of the best you’ve posted.
by Billy
11 Mar 2024, 03:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Becoming a Sweetie
Replies: 4
Views: 338

Re: Becoming a Sweetie

Sorry you feel that way. First this is not my main poetry workshop. I used to come here more but it’s been awhile. You sure make a lot of assumptions and judgments. And usually people here don’t post 5 or six poems in a row. I just came here after posting poems in a site where you post a poem a day ...
by Billy
29 Feb 2024, 02:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2
Replies: 5
Views: 617

Re: Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2

It’s a narrative poem. Most of your poems are narrative poems, maybe shorter than mine but I’m sure you’ve poems by more accomplished poets than me that are narrative and as long or longer than mine. In my humble opinion everything in the poem is salient to the whole.
by Billy
29 Feb 2024, 00:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2
Replies: 5
Views: 617

Re: Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2

You've presumed a lot of things.
by Billy
27 Feb 2024, 20:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2
Replies: 5
Views: 617

Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2

Spinocerebral Ataxia Type 2 I thought about death again today. Being a hospice nurse you’d think I would have built a wall, detached myself. There are holes in my wall. Recently, I failed when my patient was forty-two with a hereditary disease. His mother died from it. Five out of seven of his sibl...
by Billy
27 Feb 2024, 20:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Unwrapping the Truth
Replies: 8
Views: 532

Re: Unwrapping the Truth

Just my take: Unwrapping the Truth The thumb print on the dust jacket of Stalling’s new book tells me that the Amazon clerk forgot to wash his hands after a lunch of fried chicken. Compared to such blossoms as I find inside, my efforts are oily smudges, my pride a grease trap from which immortal flo...
by Billy
16 Feb 2024, 07:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Calling My Mother
Replies: 2
Views: 640

Re: Calling My Mother

Thanks Caleb for commenting.
by Billy
15 Feb 2024, 01:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Calling My Mother
Replies: 2
Views: 640

Calling My Mother

I had a mother who berated me. It was her own insecurities. Someone probably did the same to her. This is one of my very early poems and I hadn’t forgiven her yet. Calling My Mother When I call her, it is the last day, the last hour. Nothing has changed. Her voice curls around my spine, twisted ther...
by Billy
13 Feb 2024, 23:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Today I Was Her Dad Though Tonight She Asks Me Where The Man Is Who Raked Leaves
Replies: 5
Views: 710

Today I Was Her Dad Though Tonight She Asks Me Where The Man Is Who Raked Leaves

Today I Was Her Dad Though Tonight She Asks Me Where The Man Is Who Raked Leaves She got out of bed today. I asked her to help me in the yard, surprised that she said yes. She raked ulu leaves into a pile of crumbling softball mitts. After five minutes, she tired, sat in the lawn chair examining he...
by Billy
13 Feb 2024, 05:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends
Replies: 7
Views: 775

Re: A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends

Very good, Bob, the poem relates to me of a mother and daughter very close, who would confide in each other. My wife and her daughter, my stepdaughter, are that way. Lots of great images and similes.
by Billy
13 Feb 2024, 05:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Matchmaker (small changes)
Replies: 8
Views: 907

Re: The Matchmaker

Just be yourself, a human being, and write what you know, tell the truth, as Hemingway said.

I do agree with Bob, the title already says what the first line repeats. And the next lines accomplish your frustration with her, and your disdain.
by Billy
13 Feb 2024, 05:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Not Looking Forward To The Last Note
Replies: 4
Views: 672

Re: Not Looking Forward To The Last Note

Thanks, Bob
Caleb, I don't feel the need to explain what seems pretty apparent, maybe you need to read it again.
by Billy
12 Feb 2024, 20:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Not Looking Forward To The Last Note
Replies: 4
Views: 672

Not Looking Forward To The Last Note

Not Looking Forward To The Last Note I wrote a note to my grandson. He had asked me before he went to sleep to write another one like I did the last time. He likes the idea so much it's become our beginning and end of the day when he comes to visit: "Love you, Kahi, I've gone to work, Papa." When I...
by Billy
08 Feb 2024, 02:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
Replies: 4
Views: 871

Re: Of Love, Cuts and Caring

I want to see it end at "that uncaring folks get into more scrapes", cut the last line. Or replace the last line with something like this:

Too often, the ones I've loved needed bandaging.
by Billy
07 Feb 2024, 07:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Siberia
Replies: 8
Views: 2163

Re: My Siberia

revised
by Billy
05 Feb 2024, 22:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dervish Dance
Replies: 7
Views: 1234

Re: Dervish Dance

Thanks Caleb, I think we all have varying degrees of low self-esteem.
by Billy
05 Feb 2024, 22:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: blackberry pie
Replies: 6
Views: 2114

Re: blackberry pie

Thanks Siva