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by SivaRamanathan
21 Sep 2019, 21:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Letter To My Future Wife
Replies: 3
Views: 117

Re: A Letter To My Future Wife

Bob
We did a poem in school--If I were Lord of Tartary.This reminds me of that.

S
by SivaRamanathan
20 Sep 2019, 05:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Haibun on the Bonny River (1966) - V2
Replies: 1
Views: 121

Re: Iguocha on the Bonny River (1966)

F
What do you call this type of poetry? Ending with a Haiku like verse?
S
by SivaRamanathan
19 Sep 2019, 20:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Annunciation
Replies: 5
Views: 222

Re: The Annunciation

Kenneth
I like that 'stand of children.' The first line I feel is a little old fashioned,but never mind-- what if we take off the 'When ?'
by SivaRamanathan
19 Sep 2019, 20:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Invasion
Replies: 2
Views: 197

Re: Invasion

Frank
Thousands (thousands) I like the controlled narration.

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by SivaRamanathan
19 Sep 2019, 20:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Funeral
Replies: 9
Views: 306

Re: My Funeral

Bob
The last two stanzas make the poem.

S
by SivaRamanathan
19 Sep 2019, 19:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Funeral
Replies: 9
Views: 306

Re: My Funeral

Bob
This is a remarkable poem.
by SivaRamanathan
16 Sep 2019, 21:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Yanar Dag
Replies: 8
Views: 352

Re: Yanar Dag

I think the poem is finished.
by SivaRamanathan
16 Sep 2019, 20:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Religion of Cats
Replies: 3
Views: 226

Re: The Religion of Cats

I like the poem, but I am not sure you need the last two lines.
by SivaRamanathan
28 Aug 2019, 05:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Found you Again on Facebook
Replies: 8
Views: 700

Re: Found you Again on Facebook

Liked reading this.Till the logging out, everything sounds as if it is a face to face recognition.

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by SivaRamanathan
24 Aug 2019, 05:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Twenty Two Boys Go on an European Tour
Replies: 3
Views: 648

Re: Twenty Two Boys Go on an European Tour

Thank you Eira.I will work on it.

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by SivaRamanathan
22 Aug 2019, 03:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Replies: 11
Views: 1550

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Bob
Reads well.Moves forward nicely.Like the last image of coats slipping ith ease.

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by SivaRamanathan
22 Aug 2019, 03:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Twenty Two Boys Go on an European Tour
Replies: 3
Views: 648

Twenty Two Boys Go on an European Tour

A group of boys, we called Lords, from Loyola are sent on an European packaged tour Grandpa entreats the brothers at Loyola to take two more lads from the Presidential College we called little princes, When they land in Europe, at the Port of Rotterdam someone gently removed Uncle's coat from behind...
by SivaRamanathan
19 Aug 2019, 21:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "no deal is real" (celebrating a golden anniversary)
Replies: 5
Views: 780

Re: "no deal is real" (celebrating a golden anniversary)

Michael
The repetition of the 'W's works well.

S

Thank you for opening the doors,gates,mouth of the cave.
by SivaRamanathan
10 Jul 2019, 22:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
Replies: 6
Views: 1354

Re: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2

It reads well. Good that you gloss those unknown words. I rather like it.Though as Bob says what you want to hit home,is lost in the narration.

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by SivaRamanathan
08 Jul 2019, 05:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: #revolutionarywarstory
Replies: 4
Views: 1059

Re: #revolutionarywarstory

Revolutionary poem?
by SivaRamanathan
03 Jul 2019, 16:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 4613

Re: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

Thank you, I wrote this seven years ago. I thought I would take it and rework it.Unless I post it here,I am unable to edit.

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by SivaRamanathan
03 Jul 2019, 07:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 4613

Re: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

Thank you Kenneth for the alert. 'Ageing' proved and established.
by SivaRamanathan
03 Jul 2019, 06:45
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 2428

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

'Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents' is my original poem and I am not representing any other board,or submitting it elsewhere.This has never been published before and my email id is --sivajkamivelliangiri@gmail.com I consent to send it to the IBPC. "Newlyweds Start Life in the ...
by SivaRamanathan
03 Jul 2019, 06:30
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 4613

Re: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

What should I d? Say yes,but where? I seem to have forgotten.

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by SivaRamanathan
25 Jun 2019, 12:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 3111

Re: "getting antique"

Thanks Billy.I wanted to get a clarification.
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by SivaRamanathan
24 Jun 2019, 21:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 4613

Re: "Newlyweds Start Their Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

Thank you Frank.I rather like it,especially the copses of trees. I will think about the missing line.
It is
Where they stored the liquid dough,she had no idea.


This girl did not intend to live here.So where is the question of searching for a place to store the liquid dough.
by SivaRamanathan
24 Jun 2019, 14:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 3111

Re: "getting antique"

Frank I read the preview and clicked,but not on the submit icon.So it went into a draft format. I am sorry for wasting your time. It is a simple change of order in the stanzas,that I had read in Michael's poem. What if Unique antiques ageless - in time bulbs will burn out but the charmed aura from t...
by SivaRamanathan
24 Jun 2019, 05:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 3111

Re: "getting antique"

Where do drafts get stored ?
by SivaRamanathan
23 Jun 2019, 21:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 3111

Re: "getting antique"

I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.

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