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by SivaRamanathan
23 Jan 2020, 22:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: In My Cell with Alicia on New Year's Eve
Replies: 3
Views: 84

Re: In My Cell with Alicia on New Year's Eve

Bob
You have lost this line

Every night I sleep with you, Alyssa

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
23 Jan 2020, 22:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 65

Re: Paperfall

Bob

I wrote those lines in November.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
23 Jan 2020, 06:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 65

Re: Paperfall

Bob Absolutely thrilled that you wrote on the same theme. Sometimes I do not know if certain words are coined by poets and they cling to their copyright as their birthright,and it is at times like these I get reprimanded openly in forums. Actually seeing and reading your lines made me post this. The...
by SivaRamanathan
22 Jan 2020, 22:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 65

Re: Paperfall

B
Let me see if I can do something to the closing stanza.
S
by SivaRamanathan
22 Jan 2020, 21:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 65

Paperfall

1 The speed of the falling paper cascades in an arc. The Japanese girl is shredding A4 paper the same colour as her fluffy dress. 11 Lady! Looking so intense steadfast with scissors white cataract, that flows in a fall on the ground a thin trickle the path it has chosen. Who is the painter what his ...
by SivaRamanathan
22 Jan 2020, 21:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: In My Cell with Alicia on New Year's Eve
Replies: 3
Views: 84

Re: Another New Year's Eve

Bob

Terrific opening line.

S
by SivaRamanathan
21 Jan 2020, 06:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.
Replies: 4
Views: 160

Re: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.

Bob

Does chug-chugging fit,instead of' cognizing?' And also 'plied me with her recollections of the railways,' ;Plied 'is no right.Can you suggest the right word?

"iva
by SivaRamanathan
20 Jan 2020, 19:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Follow the Poem
Replies: 4
Views: 291

Re: Follow the Poem

Perfect!
by SivaRamanathan
20 Jan 2020, 19:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.
Replies: 4
Views: 160

Re: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.

V2 Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair. Grandmother ran to pick up a fallen mango during her own wedding procession plied me with her recollections of the railways of engines that ran on coal fires and steam. At one time, a cycle was brought down from the train; a man went cycli...
by SivaRamanathan
19 Jan 2020, 20:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.
Replies: 4
Views: 160

Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.

V2 Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair. Grandmother ran to pick up a fallen mango during her own wedding procession plied me with her recollections of the railways of engines that ran on coal fires and steam. At one time, a cycle was brought down from the train; a man went cycli...
by SivaRamanathan
18 Jan 2020, 11:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Follow the Poem
Replies: 4
Views: 291

Re: Follow the Poem

Bob

Read this.But I have to read a couple of more times,before I can say anything. I generally like it, but don't you think it is a little too long ? I am not saying something for the sake of saying,though. I will come back to it later.

Sivai
by SivaRamanathan
18 Jan 2020, 11:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Replies: 8
Views: 430

Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love

Bob,

It is Pongal season now. The15th was Pongal for the Sun God,The 16th Pongal for the cattle,17th the Sight-seeing Pongal.And thank you for your good heart.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
17 Jan 2020, 09:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Replies: 8
Views: 430

Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love

Bob
Nice imagery here.

as inevitable as pollen
or birdsong in mid-summer.


You need a full stop at the end of the poem, after 'loose.'
by SivaRamanathan
17 Jan 2020, 08:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Replies: 8
Views: 430

Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love

Bob

Now I understand.It is ----------.(I forget the word,there is a term for it,we learnt it in literature) I didn't realize you were trying to be authentic to Dicksonian Poetry, Let me read and reread it, and maybe I will get used to it.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
16 Jan 2020, 17:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Replies: 8
Views: 430

Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love

Bob

I am not quite sure about the 'heart's floor'.It sounds contrived.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
06 Jan 2020, 18:52
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Replies: 13
Views: 872

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:

Michael

Thanks.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
06 Jan 2020, 08:19
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Replies: 13
Views: 872

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:

Michael

Have you accepted to forward my poem 'Marakuli' to the January IBPC ?

Thanks and sorry for not being alert.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
05 Jan 2020, 23:04
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Replies: 13
Views: 872

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:

Dear fellow poets

Happy New Year to all my fellow travellers.
Thanks Michael and Bob and whoever else who nominated 'Marakuli.'

Siva Ramanathan
by SivaRamanathan
05 Jan 2020, 23:01
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Replies: 13
Views: 872

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:

'Marakuli', is my unpublished poem; my mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com,and I am not representing any other forum. Marakuli On my father's side, a tree at the moment of death. On my mother's side, the spirit of the mountain Yeti. I am born in the imagination. With coconut husk toes and nails...
by SivaRamanathan
21 Dec 2019, 06:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Replies: 5
Views: 1049

Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson

whatever
you are doing, to lose yourself

Now I get it Bob.It is the syllable count of 'whatever which makes it necessary to keep it as a stand alone line.
by SivaRamanathan
20 Dec 2019, 22:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Replies: 5
Views: 1049

Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson

B

Is the linebreak in the fifth stanza, deliberate?

S
by SivaRamanathan
09 Dec 2019, 08:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Coming Back
Replies: 16
Views: 2250

Re: Is There a Chicken Soup That Can Save Me

Following the thread.
by SivaRamanathan
06 Dec 2019, 23:35
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Marakuli
Replies: 6
Views: 1387

Re: Marakuli

B
Thank you.I think this is better.I will keep your version, if I may.
S
by SivaRamanathan
05 Dec 2019, 23:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Marakuli
Replies: 6
Views: 1387

Marakuli

Edit 1 On my father's side, a tree at the moment of death. On my mother's side, the spirit of the mountain Yeti. I am born in the imagination. With coconut husk toes and nails of dead rhino skin. I am monarch of the dark night, but I am also a gnarled tree-- with ugly, misshapen eyebrows, huge seed-...
by SivaRamanathan
05 Dec 2019, 20:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Moon Walk
Replies: 11
Views: 1989

Re: The Moon Walk

Judy

I did that with my Big House poem.But only after my mentor/poet friend told me to.

Siva

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