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Judges Judge me today Judge me from yesterday Till tomorrow if I fall away From your ever fading grace Say it all Speak in codes Unfailing words that destroy But I’m not here to stay I reside on the part of life Far from this place I call it home And I make it my own Safe Far from this hate Because ...

I would like to know what this poem means to you, if anything.

I reworked the first part, please tell me if it is more vivid/better than before. Thanks, every time :) Judge Judge me today Judge me for yesterday And tomorrow if I fall away From your ever fading grace Say it all Speak in codes Unfailing words that destroy But I’m not here to stay I reside on the ...

I liked this poem, it made me feel like this man was very proud of his work and found beauty in it.
Michael has some good advice though.
"^^ The antecedent of "She"? or does "she" refer to the bronze bar and its copper haze?"

Loved the ending too.

Nice job very descriptive and visual, that's something I have a hard time doing. You took something lifeless in most eyes and gave it character. Very nice job.

Thanks, that's very helpful and I will try to heed everyone's advice in the next one. Thank you one more time.
Please read a new one I wrote today called Judge, it's deep (in my eyes) but I need all the advice I can get.

Judge Judge me today Judge me for yesterday And tomorrow if I fall away Kuz I’m not here to stay Far from outer space I’m Just visiting this great place But if I fade from grace Know there is a clean slate A new page for each day So I will close my eyes and pray I can awake On the other side In a di...

Thank you for the advice, I do my best but yes they feel kind of shallow sometimes. Its really hard for me to put feelings into words. I'm only 23 so maybe if I keep getting advice and practice I can become a deeper person and maybe my work can do the same. I really appreciate the advice! Thanks aga...

Thank you very much!

I reply to posts all the time but no one ever replies back, almost never! Am I wrong to post here? All I wanna do is get someone's opinion. I try to be nice to everyone as well as be a good critic. I work like crazy so don't always have time to be here but I try whenever I can. If you're willing to ...

Hopeful to see Who I would be The future me But could it be I was made to believe The real me Was the idea of who I should be When I was young I saw it in my eyes For so long I felt so small in your sight I lost myself in a lie And I thought that’s who I should become The idea and it followed me So ...

Thank you meenas17

Check out my poem/song "all about me"/ others too and tell me what you think!! Thanks!

love the "live a thousand lives" part

Hopeful to see Who I would be The future me But could it be I was made to believe The real me Was the idea of who I should be When I was young I saw it in my eyes For so long I felt so small in your sight I lost myself in a lie I thought I should become Tell me who I should be Tell me what you see w...

When I met you the first time Clueless to what you would do I gave it my all When your eyes met mine Careless I gave you my heart You took my breath away You took The best day of my life The best day of my life 1. On the roof top watching The sky fall as the stars shine Talking about life and The wa...

Great job! It's very deep.

Very nice. Sounds like you've seen a lot.

Another day gone Another minute of my life I can’t find And I can’t go back What will I do with the time I have left Tick tock goes the clock And this is my chance kuz It’s not over yet I will do my best This is my chance I see it in my heart One more time I see it in my heart now It’s a way out It’...

I Guess you're all speechless when you read my work.

Please make this the place it was meant to be and reply once in a while.
Thank you everyone.

Another day gone With each minute that passes by What will I do with my life And what will I find Lost in the thoughts I fall behind Looking for a love That I never find I fly above like a dove Looking for light But the day is gone I’m lost in the dark What will I find In this life With each minute ...

I wish I could rewind The hands of time Take the seconds back And live it the way it was When you…. When you loved me For who I was That’s what I’ve been looking for My whole life Tick tock and I’m lost Reliving the memories before We were out of time I tried so hard But I found only one thing An e...

Thank you for responding. I'm glad I'm not the only one that feels that way about rap. My goal was to "attack" rap using rap. I try to be as unconventional as possible lol. If I may ask, why have you attempted not to respond?