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by meenas17
28 Jan 2020, 21:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: On Your Mark Get Set Go
Replies: 0
Views: 4190

On Your Mark Get Set Go

The days pass in a hurry why do they? Could they not take time to breathe, to enjoy? Ever on the run, they flow into months, thereon to years. It is as though the day before I got admitted in school. Now my grandson is going to complete schooling I wink in a blink. Silence! A great deal has flown. I...
by meenas17
07 Jan 2020, 04:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: It Is About Algi
Replies: 2
Views: 1636

Re: It Is About Algi

The last stanza need to be removed. This is the majority's opinion as yours in the other board.
I will do so in the revision and pay attention to the punctuation.
Thanks for your help, Bob.
by meenas17
05 Jan 2020, 15:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: It Is About Algi
Replies: 2
Views: 1636

It Is About Algi

my chef, proficient in cooking, rude in behaviour. He prepares delicious food in no time. An expert, no doubt. Every Sunday, Algi has to go to the market, in rain or sun to buy vegetables, if disallowed mumbles. Not minding his weak legs, he walks briskly during the buying spree Limping he returns w...
by meenas17
31 Dec 2019, 18:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wishing All A Happy 2020
Replies: 1
Views: 1320

Wishing All A Happy 2020

A new decade that of 2020 dawns. Should be one of great promises. Should be one of fine texture. Should be one of great achievements , Should be crowded ' with happiness and joy. Should nurture peace and considerations worldwide, Let in the new decade Writers Block receive glorious poems and win lau...
by meenas17
30 Dec 2019, 09:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Eyes Grow Yellow
Replies: 3
Views: 1694

Re: My Eyes Grow Yellow

Bob,
You have given a new look to the poem.
let me read again and then engage in refurbishing the whole.

Thanks.
by meenas17
29 Dec 2019, 17:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Eyes Grow Yellow
Replies: 3
Views: 1694

My Eyes Grow Yellow

as i make way to school. I see through the glass find my mom sitting pretty. Neatly dressed in ironed sari glancing through the newspaper. It is I who has to go to school while she spends her time happy. It is lunch time. Return home for lunch. Mom is busy playing Veena, Melody flows. I finish meals...
by meenas17
13 Dec 2019, 15:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Manoeuvre
Replies: 5
Views: 2358

Re: A Manoeuvre

Tried to make the poem sharp.
Tell me how you find reading the version, Bob.

Thanks
by meenas17
12 Dec 2019, 13:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Manoeuvre
Replies: 5
Views: 2358

Re: A Manoeuvre

Very good suggestions, Bob.
I will work and post a revision soon.
Thanks.
by meenas17
11 Dec 2019, 18:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Manoeuvre
Replies: 5
Views: 2358

A Manoeuvre

I go for a walk every evening a ploy to keep my legs active. Mine being a strange case, able to walk in ease for half an hour. Peculiar, being unable to stand for more than quarter an hour. I look at myself with a keenness nowhere did I examine myself so close. Neither obese, being for sure, nor sle...
by meenas17
05 Dec 2019, 14:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Moon Walk
Replies: 11
Views: 3920

Re: The Moon Walk

Judy gives useful suggestions. Her edits are effective and render the verse enjoyable.
Great!
by meenas17
27 Nov 2019, 18:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Could Be For "Something"
Replies: 1
Views: 1884

Could Be For "Something"

Being a day of tedium chasing through for requirements in the immigration for long time visas. Last renewal was not so tiring. The regulations have changed. The officials turn unfriendly, resent direct applicants, insist to come through agents. The application is simple, easy to fill, the conditions...
by meenas17
09 Nov 2019, 20:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: One of A Rare Breed
Replies: 2
Views: 2483

Re: One of A Rare Breed

Michael ( MV)
Very true.
Should be "One of A Common Breed"

Meena
by meenas17
08 Nov 2019, 20:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: One of A Rare Breed
Replies: 2
Views: 2483

One of A Rare Breed

That one my cook had been with me for ten years,in an impulse calls quit.. Taken by surprise. I fail to seek the reason. He is temperamental goes off his head. turns quarrelsome finds fault with fellow workers. Fights with them. Screams and yells. He is an expert cook prepares dishes in no time and ...
by meenas17
08 Nov 2019, 20:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Walt Whitman, 1863
Replies: 7
Views: 3640

Re: Walt Whitman, 1863

A good poem, Bob.
Each stanza is relevant,
One leads to the other, yet they stand out.
That be the beauty of the poem.
by meenas17
06 Nov 2019, 20:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Tryst
Replies: 6
Views: 3712

Re: A Tryst

Ken, thanks for the understanding.
I keep getting such dreams very often nowadays.
This being one of them.
by meenas17
06 Nov 2019, 20:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Tryst
Replies: 6
Views: 3712

Re: A Tryst

Judy, thanks for commenting.
I will look into the faults.
I state it is a dream.
Dreams do not have logic.
It is the subconscious that is working.
by meenas17
03 Nov 2019, 20:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Tryst
Replies: 6
Views: 3712

A Tryst

Caught in between the traffic , I stand aghast. Wholly drenched, the clothes cling to the body. My feet trapped in the slush remains static. I attempt to pull them out, I slip and slope. Straighten myself stand all through unable to take a step. Rains turn torrential I go down slowly inch by inch. S...
by meenas17
03 Nov 2019, 19:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Across The River
Replies: 10
Views: 4434

Re: Across The River

Yes, Judy .
3 votes. thumbs up!
by meenas17
03 Nov 2019, 19:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Crossing Into South Carolina
Replies: 8
Views: 4897

Re: Crossing Into South Carolina

Quiet distracting .
by meenas17
29 Oct 2019, 06:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) - V2
Replies: 5
Views: 4025

Re: A Sparrow Found (1917)

An elaborate one. Never once I lost interest.
by meenas17
29 Oct 2019, 06:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Planters Moon
Replies: 7
Views: 3282

Re: Planters Moon

The last stanza is strong.
Man's inability to that of a worm's possibility.
Great imagery.
by meenas17
29 Oct 2019, 06:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Red Spider Lilies
Replies: 4
Views: 2711

Re: Red Spider Lilies

Flowers extend companionship.
Well written.
by meenas17
25 Oct 2019, 15:35
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Maze I Am In
Replies: 9
Views: 3520

Re: A Maze I Am In

Billy,

Your editing has unwound the maze I am in .
The version is an improvement of the first.
I go with it.
Thanks,
by meenas17
25 Oct 2019, 15:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Maze I Am In
Replies: 9
Views: 3520

Re: A Maze I Am In

Judy, I do not know how to clear the obscurity.
I tried but failed.

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