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Much appreciated Bob for the nom, but I am planning
to put this one out.

I echo what Bob said,
nothing you've done has caused this hiatus.
We've all been busy.
I won't be back for a moth or so, things happening.
Don't worry Judy, all is well - keep writing.

Thanks all. Edith Piaf was perhaps one of the greatest French female singers ever. He voice was powerful and she could carry an audience to the point of tears. She sang about romantic love, poverty, the rough end of life. She had a bad start in life, poverty, rickets, blindness through lack of care....

Meena, you are improving all the time
Judy makes some valid points
it could do with some work.

Just a little tidying up, that's all.

I like to get proper criticism and detailed truthful likes or dislikes - detailed critique I don't appreciate sarcasm, rudeness, violence, or blasphemy but honest to goodness replies are like gold. Someone once said my poem was absolute rubbish then wrote to me some time later praising my stickabili...

Judy, relax
you are among friends here
I'm sorry if you felt pressure from my probing.

I assure you this forum is not being abused

Hi Judy not offended and there is no request or wish for you to remove I was trying to find the intent was it to say there is no God or to nudge us one way or 'tother I will ignore content in future and stick to form But a poem without content is like straw in the wind in my opine. There has to be a...

39 steps has been made several time
good film
when you think about it our lives are a number of film sets
and props and actors come and go all he time
Interesting concept.

God is coming more into your work
I wonder if there is a reason

It could be N has lost faith
and is complaining the He (God) has left her
not sure.

There is no Santa that is true - lie a figment of imagination for children and some grown ups

Jaime Mera MISINTERPRETING A COLLAGE DURING TRUMP’S PRESIDENCY I see a wasp. It’s Trump and Pence and every televangelist that condemns lesbians. Sean Hannity’s anti-LGBT rhetoric, like the hornet that crawls into the cracks of attics in America’s heartland, riles up red-hatted white males to swarm ...

I think the title: 'Fledgling' gives much away, yet I prefer it
as it removes doubt.

And as Bob said details enliven a poem as long as they are not irrelevant
fledgling is so apt.

Someone once wrote 'Poetry isn't a code to be broken'. But most modern poetry is like a crossword puzzle where the reader has to do so much work by himself/herself and interpret. Seemingly the reader can deduce a completely different narrative from what the poet intended and yet it is still a good p...

Circumambulate is a valid word just it is so unwieldly in my opinion
other might prefer it
I would say circle around the cow
or circle around
even use parade around.
Your choice, sorry if I have confused matters.

Difficult to read with all the unnecessary spaces. Some work to do yet. As I understand it Hindus do not worship cows but hold them in high esteem, clarity with word use is essential for good writing. Glad you dropped 'worship of the shit-hole', when you meant to say circulated the rear-end of the c...

A Sparrow Found (1917) by FranktheFrank » 25 Oct 2019, 01:25 V2 17 November 2109 "I liked to watch her sleep; she slept like a baby." Simone (Momone) Berteaut, Piaf , Opera Mundi, Paris, 1969. The hiss of steam from a coffee machine a gurgle of absinthe into a glass the rattle of coins on the counte...

Seems a good start
add the word 'prick' in there
that will add drama.
We would like you to stay
but, don't burn up.

What's wrong in being white and privileged.
The only time we were the same level was WW2 in the UK
and even then rich people could buy extra food.
In 100 years whites will be the poor, Chinese will take over.
Enjoy while it lasts.

Wasn't Emily a closet lesbian?
Or had inclinations that way.

I think this is your best this month Bob.
Maybe another word for addiction,
something like affliction.

It is long
it is wordy
It's a diary conceit in a way of a fictional character.

I like the concept. I think the nightmare line is a bit strong, something else, regret, wanting to make a move, but afraid. Your neighbour poem has sparked off mine. It's hard for old people to date like youngsters but reading the papers they seem to be very busy or you might say promiscuous. Well y...

All day I make my rounds, sweeping the water into eddies as kids and mothers bounce in from the sidewalk, the kids as eager as finches on the first warm day of spring, chatting and nodding their little heads. The shop is as colourful as a birthday: canaries, red beaks, orange legs... A girl dazzled ...

I think it's too fast Bob
suggest slowing it down with longer lines
there's a lot to take in and slowing down would
enable the reader to absorb.