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Thanks to all at the Writer’s Block for much support.

Siva is desperate to post a poem for this month,
She can't log in.

Thank you for your input.
I agree about too borrowed.

Excellent work Meena

My apology, Meena.

Crows believe themselves to be superior to man.

You make a valid point Siva the law condemns because none can keep it, faith gives hope. In the Christian sense, and I'm pleased you mention it, we are no longer under law, but grace. I think it is better to say: more valid than legal entities in the last s. You need that before 'go with the wind' f...

You were honoured Billy
a special experience.

That’s what we were given. Some placed a pile of wood, lit the two matches and stood back awaiting a blaze as if a miracle was about to happen. Others carefully cut tinder, but if it was damp in any way, failure. The clever ones on a grey wet day hunted recesses: spider’s webs, fluff, dust, wood chi...

Billy this is top drawer
I know you have been concerned at your muse lately
I think state tree has been said before but I still like it,
Van Gogh overused imo
Short and sweet, you could add a little more but very good.

After they'd moved overseas Sitske spent time drawing windows, month after month; each pane carefully drawn, one row of three 12 high by 8 wide, split into 4 panes 6 by 4. The lower rank the same as the top, set in rows. ‘Windows, Sitske pronounced emphatically, these are the windows’ ‘What about th...

Haha funny
enjoyed.

Thanks Billy
There is a slight change in voice as you say after the Sunday stanza.
N is one person and meandering through the past in his mind
or maybe telling a friend, or even justifying his actions
and his fears for the future.

She was an office on a top floor,
and breathtaking views.

Perhaps: 'with breathtaking views'.

Suggest you promote her to full president:

Mom was too busy for us,
a furious presidential firefly.

Thanks Siva, I have attempted to addressed Bob's concerns in S7 and shown progression. It really is about the constant hardships, fear of death and primeval conditions where a man finds comfort in the beauty of a woman's body and help in the most unlikeliest of places and thanks his maker for such a...

Point taken Bob, John studying is part of a larger story, shall dispense with it. 1831 refers to the Rebecca riots, problem is explaining vs telling, will have to think. The myriad details should all build up showing N's life and one glorious day in all that, quite wicked but nevertheless enthralling.

Iron Ore Miner (1859) Before Pen y Garn, at Trallwn we slept in barns and watched our children grow large eyes. We gleaned oats spilled by the ponies, and scavenged from the turnip slicer set for winter fodder At Dowlais we walked miles after five underground, time to dwell on home and hearth. The r...

Hinduism

Siva
You could drop 'their' in the title
with no adverse effects.

Mahaaprasthaana -The Great Journey “Death is a most natural experience, not to be feared. It is a quick transition from the physical world to the astral plane..." Satguru S'ivaya Subramuniyaswami, p. 99. I fear not hell nor of Satan I fear a woeful birth even a devilish mind brought on by the negati...

Eria
I prefer this to all that have gone before.
A pal is constantly reminding me of the power of first drafts.
I think I'll nominate this.

Old people are referred to by the young
as antiques Meena
cruel I know
but I don't care
I agree with Michael, priceless

My nominations:

1. Bob's: Traveling Mexico

2. Michael's: Getting Antique

3. Siva's: Newlyweds

If it is allowable to nominate more than three, then:

4. Meena's: Kali
5. Eira's: Patches Revenge

Pity Billy has pulled out.
Eira hasn't posted this month that I can see.

We suffered from drafts for years
since putting in central-heating
we don't suffer any more.

Glad you like, you weave it the way you want,
just a few ideas.