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by BobBradshaw
26 Jun 2022, 04:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Letter from Arles
Replies: 11
Views: 431

Re: Letter from Arles

Thanks, Ieuan… I have applied your suggestions. I like the simpler title. I am not sure about cowering vs shuddering. Maybe shuddering has slightly better sonics? Dunno
by BobBradshaw
25 Jun 2022, 18:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Letter from Arles
Replies: 11
Views: 431

Re: Vincent Writes to Gauguin After He Flees Arles

Thanks, Ieuan. You make a lot of suggestions, and I can take advantage of some of them. Your advice will make v1 considerably better. It is too long. Let me see how it turns out.
by BobBradshaw
23 Jun 2022, 21:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Letter from Arles
Replies: 11
Views: 431

Re: Vincent Writes to Gauguin After He Flees

Thanks, Ken. I have shortened the poem.
by BobBradshaw
22 Jun 2022, 20:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Indian Pipe
Replies: 2
Views: 147

Re: Indian Pipe

Strong example of extended metaphor...I like how you intertwine the Emily details...especially the father's death. When I first read the poem the word "parasitic" was jolting. After maybe the 5th reading I was fine with it. I'm not sure if it's a weakness or strength. A very enjoyable read.
by BobBradshaw
21 Jun 2022, 09:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Letter from Arles
Replies: 11
Views: 431

Re: Vincent

Revised
by BobBradshaw
20 Jun 2022, 03:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Letter from Arles
Replies: 11
Views: 431

Letter from Arles

V1(revised, with Ieuan's suggestions): Letter from Arles Dear Paul, some nights I slipped into your room as you slept. A mother standing over her son’s bed knowing any day he could leave home, to strike out on his own, knows my feeling of impending loss. How could I ask you to stay, you with a wife ...
by BobBradshaw
17 Jun 2022, 21:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Give Me a Man
Replies: 8
Views: 705

Re: Give Me a Man

Thanks, Ieuan. Do you mind looking at V4? I think V4 is the best version....
by BobBradshaw
16 Jun 2022, 04:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Give Me a Man
Replies: 8
Views: 705

Re: Give Me a Man

Let me know if either V2 or V3 works...thx
by BobBradshaw
15 Jun 2022, 05:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Give Me a Man
Replies: 8
Views: 705

Re: Give Me a Man

Let me know if V2 works, and how it can be improved. Thx again, Ieuan, for your suggestions. Bob
by BobBradshaw
15 Jun 2022, 01:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Give Me a Man
Replies: 8
Views: 705

Re: Give Me a Man

Thanks, Ieuan, for your concrete suggestions. I will have to think about everything.
by BobBradshaw
14 Jun 2022, 23:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Give Me a Man
Replies: 8
Views: 705

Re: Give Me a Man

Thanks, Ieuan, for your enthusiasm. I am not sure how well the close works. Is it wordy? Should I take out a line? I haven’t decided.
by BobBradshaw
13 Jun 2022, 05:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Give Me a Man
Replies: 8
Views: 705

Give Me a Man

v4: " Sometimes, a cigar is just a cigar.” -—Sigmund Freud Give Me a Man who doesn't gag on his cigar whenever a cheeky girl like me brings up Freud. After all, I've seen cigars with ribbons tied on them as gifts, bought by wives for their precious husbands in airport stores, the ribbons reminiscent...
by BobBradshaw
12 Jun 2022, 23:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Medicine Hat
Replies: 1
Views: 311

Re: Medicine Hat

We live in extraordinary places, which mostly go unrecognized by us who drink by the pool, and feed the slot machines. I love the details, especially about the Blackfoot women. I also like how the close pulls back, to give us death’s perspective…and although I doubt our bones would be carved in scri...
by BobBradshaw
10 Jun 2022, 21:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Newton's Dream
Replies: 4
Views: 446

Re: Isaac Newton in Dream Mode

Sorry, my brain pretends to play dead when math enters into anything. Or maybe it doesn't need to pretend. At any rate, I'm left puzzled. I would much rather read your Dylan Thomas poem you mentioned.
by BobBradshaw
09 Jun 2022, 20:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Li Po, Adrift
Replies: 6
Views: 565

Re: Li Po, Adrift

V2 is in place. Please let me know your thoughts.
by BobBradshaw
09 Jun 2022, 19:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Li Po, Adrift
Replies: 6
Views: 565

Re: Li Po, Adrift

Thanks, Ieuan. I like your lines. I may use them.

Thanks, Siva, for commenting.
by BobBradshaw
09 Jun 2022, 04:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Li Po, Adrift
Replies: 6
Views: 565

Re: Li Po, Adrift

Thanks, Ieuan, I love your comments/questions. Li Po is famous for his drinking. A tankard wouldn’t be a problem. And dragons are spirits in Chinese culture living in rivers. You’re probably right, that paddling/rowing might work better than wandering. And I can see your point questioning the drinki...
by BobBradshaw
08 Jun 2022, 22:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Li Po, Adrift
Replies: 6
Views: 565

Li Po, Adrift

V2: Li Po, Adrift I row alone through these canyons where dragons sleep in purling rivers. Hummingbirds drain the last nectar from a muddy branch’s blossoms. It's the end of autumn and an early snow flies in as cranes fly off over Wu Shan. How quickly sixty years pass! Draining a tankard of wine, ad...
by BobBradshaw
07 Jun 2022, 05:24
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2022:
Replies: 21
Views: 1236

Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2022:

Thanks, Michael. Your explanation of the stint is very detailed. It sounds awful but it is better to know in advance, to know the questions to ask.
by BobBradshaw
06 Jun 2022, 20:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kate, Visiting a Friend During Mating Season on her Ostrich Ranch
Replies: 7
Views: 695

Re: Kate, Visiting a Friend During Mating Season on her Ostrich Ranch

Hi Ken...Yeh, it's weird. I remembered an article I read many years ago on this subject, and that provided the impetus to the poem. Here's an article about this bizarre behavior: https://petkeen.com/are-ostriches-attracted-to-humans/ There are also other articles on the net. I always appreciate hone...