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by IndianaDP
28 Mar 2018, 17:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Jewish Cemetery Queens, New York
Replies: 4
Views: 1748

Re: Jewish Cemetery Queens, New York

A very respectful and peaceful reflection of passing. I find it interesting to consider what images we retain after a death and passage of time. My grandmother passing a plate of her homemade fudge, grandfathers lunchbox, mother’s crippling shyness, etc. The poem, a plain spoken, straight forward na...
by IndianaDP
27 Mar 2018, 23:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)
Replies: 15
Views: 3812

Re: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (revision)

Bernie, so happy you like the revision and honored with your nomination. I began making cuts yesterday and with the aid of your suggestions will surely get it all pulled together. I’m not sure of procedures, but I’m sure there are many nomination, should mine be selected I will be happy to represent...
by IndianaDP
27 Mar 2018, 16:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)
Replies: 15
Views: 3812

Re: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (revision)

Thanks Michael, you are most likely correct that the final poem will be a melding of the two versions. My original idea was a simple relationship of two friends. In the second I wanted to go deeper, and reveal a jealousy brought on by the narrators handicap. We will see how it goes from here.
by IndianaDP
27 Mar 2018, 04:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hanging Garden Of Babylon
Replies: 19
Views: 4233

Re: Hanging Garden Of Babylon

Or perhaps a ‘straw broom’
by IndianaDP
26 Mar 2018, 23:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hanging Garden Of Babylon
Replies: 19
Views: 4233

Re: Hanging Garden Of Babylon

I read and commented on your poem in another forum, glad to see it here. You have gotten many great suggestions, so I don’t wish to get in the way of your revisions. I do have one nit, when you say, ‘In Haste I strike them with a vacuum cleaner’ I see someone swinging the whole machine through the a...
by IndianaDP
25 Mar 2018, 16:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)
Replies: 15
Views: 3812

Re: The Direction I Walk in the Morning

Thanks frank, you got it, midwestern USA.
by IndianaDP
24 Mar 2018, 23:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)
Replies: 15
Views: 3812

Re: The Direction I Walk in the Morning

Hey Bernie, you have me thinking again, it feels good. Not being active in forums these past few years has cause me to become lazy and not push my writing. Anyway, time to experiment and see where this goes. Great to read my old poem Altoona, it’s been sometime since I wrote it.
by IndianaDP
24 Mar 2018, 21:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)
Replies: 15
Views: 3812

Re: The Direction I Walk in the Morning

Thanks Bob, just so you know I’m Dale Patterson from the Waters.
by IndianaDP
24 Mar 2018, 17:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)
Replies: 15
Views: 3812

The Direction I Walk in the Morning (final revision)

Final Revision- My left leg is longer than the right, orthopedic shoes keep me level. I meet an old friend at Fourth Street Cafe, step with a burled maple cane. Bill’s Viet Nam ball cap, brightly embroidered,101st Airborne, tilts on his head. We sit near the coat rack. Soiled dishes rattle the well ...
by IndianaDP
24 Mar 2018, 17:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Endearments in South Chicago
Replies: 8
Views: 2476

Re: Endearments in South Chicago

Hello Bernie, so great to read you again, and being from Chicago I could resist this poem. As always, you have used creative details to move your story forward and keep the reader engaged. Neighborhoods are strange animals, everyone knows about everyone and yet know one really knows anyone. And so w...
by IndianaDP
24 Mar 2018, 17:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Josef Myslivecek
Replies: 11
Views: 2926

Re: Josef Myslivecek

Hi Bob, I was unfamiliar with this story so your poem had me captured. The stanza concerning the ‘ass of a surgeon’ was especially striking. As always Bernie give you some excellent thoughts, good luck as you finalize, it’s a beauty.
by IndianaDP
24 Mar 2018, 17:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Re: Waiting for a bus at Armarnath Temple
Replies: 7
Views: 2233

Re: Re: Waiting for a Bus Outside Armarnath Temple-Final Ver

Hi Frank, I’m glad to see your wonderful poem nominated, well deserved. I love ‘near naked save for an umbrella’ and S2 is just perfect. I have never been to India, but through your poem can feel the atmosphere. A great story of love in the New Delhi smog.

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