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by Billy
04 Feb 2024, 05:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Heat
Replies: 2
Views: 624

Re: My Heat

This is probably my favorite of yours so far that I've seen posted here. I'll read it some more and maybe come back with a suggestion, maybe not, maybe it needs nothing.
by Billy
02 Feb 2024, 00:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
Replies: 3
Views: 838

Re: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?

Thanks Bob and Caleb.
Caleb, I write in the style William Carlos Williams in his later career--writing in the language I speak and hear spoken. Of course I do not write with his skill.
by Billy
02 Feb 2024, 00:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dervish Dance
Replies: 7
Views: 1234

Re: Dervish Dance

Well, I did know about dervish dancing in high school but that's not the point. N, now that he's older, is calling all his dancing a dervish dance, whether he was doing the Mashed Potatoes, the Dog, the Monkey--what the dances were called in those day--or doing the sexual mating dance.
by Billy
01 Feb 2024, 20:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
Replies: 3
Views: 838

DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?

Does That Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me? Once, I jumped in a freezing lake, naked, in shock, quickly swam to the dock, scrambled out. It might as well have been a lake of fire. What if I'd been the burning bush, my skin as red as the time I was stung by a swarm of bees. Somehow it seems...
by Billy
01 Feb 2024, 19:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dervish Dance
Replies: 7
Views: 1234

Re: Dervish Dance

Thanks Bob and Caleb

Dervish dancing is a part of the Sufi way in Islam to connect closer to God, swirling like planets, praising and meditating, a mystical practice.
by Billy
01 Feb 2024, 05:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Dream at the Beach
Replies: 6
Views: 1033

Re: A Dream at the Beach

Now that you mention it I think you could eliminate S2. As to the friend, without that it is still understandable, and just extraneous material and isn't needed.
by Billy
31 Jan 2024, 22:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dervish Dance
Replies: 7
Views: 1234

Dervish Dance

Dervish Dance When I was much younger, I did the dervish dance in the Central High gymnasium. From the Mashed Potatoes to the Monkey, to the Dog. Mr. Doos kicked me out, said it was lewd. None of that while he was on watch. In my twenties I did the dervish dance with all the women. They didn't know...
by Billy
31 Jan 2024, 22:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Dream at the Beach
Replies: 6
Views: 1033

Re: A Dream at the Beach

Just my edits, take or leave. The last line in the second stanza needs changed to me, but I hadn't come up with anything right now. A Dream at the Beach While sleeping peacefully in the guest house I half-woke to girls laughing, tittering--teen-aged girls, projecting all of the judgmental pettiness ...
by Billy
18 Jan 2024, 20:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: blackberry pie
Replies: 6
Views: 2114

Re: blackberry pie

Thanks Caleb
by Billy
18 Jan 2024, 20:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Siberia
Replies: 8
Views: 2176

Re: My Siberia

ThAnks Caleb. I will consider your suggestions.
by Billy
18 Jan 2024, 20:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Archiving Colonization
Replies: 8
Views: 1682

Re: Archiving Colonization

I like the poem as is. It is very effective in its undertone. I love that N can see into his mind and likes the way he writes.
by Billy
17 Jan 2024, 23:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: blackberry pie
Replies: 6
Views: 2114

Re: blackberry pie

Thanks Bob
by Billy
17 Jan 2024, 23:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Siberia
Replies: 8
Views: 2176

Re: My Siberia

Thanks Bob
by Billy
17 Jan 2024, 22:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Replies: 5
Views: 5563

Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges

Worthy and timely choice of biographic poem, written with seeming ease to read with grace and subtlety.
by Billy
17 Jan 2024, 22:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Siberia
Replies: 8
Views: 2176

My Siberia

My Siberia revised Maybe it's this sudden winter, mild thus far, for the record books, now below zero, frozen doors, the world cracking beneath boots, steps feel for surety, for freedom from a fall, the breath I've never noticed before, a cloud before me like vapors of dry ice, counting steps, stil...
by Billy
17 Jan 2024, 21:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: blackberry pie
Replies: 6
Views: 2114

blackberry pie

blackberry pie in the middle of the first grade holding on to the real thing whatever that was blackberry bird shit on the old Edsel grandma turning purple grandpa churning and churning the world goes round thickening into this moment with each turn ice and salt cream and sugar the contradictions t...
by Billy
17 Jan 2024, 20:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: God Lives (version 3)
Replies: 9
Views: 1929

Re: God Lives

This is the best of the poems you've posted so far. "in desires so strong they lead to crimes"

I'm just not sure about the last line; it doesn't seem to match the quality of the rest of the poem. Maybe.
by Billy
14 Jan 2024, 01:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Nutritionist
Replies: 21
Views: 2700

Re: The Nutritionist

I like what Wallace Stevens said about the mind, intellect:

Poetry must resist the intelligence almost successfully.
by Billy
09 Jan 2024, 03:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The New Year's Fish
Replies: 5
Views: 1672

Re: The New Year's Fish

I like the stretch you take in this poem and the poem, Pilot Whale. I believe they both word in that context.
by Billy
07 Jan 2024, 05:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sick Dog
Replies: 3
Views: 1207

Sick Dog

Sick Dog It's night. A cold night. I've turned up the thermostat. Heavy socks. A blanket. Chills, no fever unless the thermometer's lying. It's all a lie right now. I was grateful a half-a-day ago. Cough, cough, cough! Where's this going, back and forth between Death Valley and the arctic? My body ...
by Billy
04 Jan 2024, 22:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Don't Give You Any Answers
Replies: 3
Views: 1614

I Don't Give You Any Answers

I Don't Give You Any Answers A drunk man kicks a puppy to death. A child sits at the feet of unrequited love, crying in the alley, waiting for God to notice. The wrong number. I won't give up easily. A will I was given that's useless. What has it ever gotten me, other than more misery upon misery. ...
by Billy
02 Jan 2024, 03:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wish You Were Here
Replies: 7
Views: 1845

Re: Wish You Were Here

Yeah, miss Bernie, he was one of a kind, a great poet and critic.
by Billy
01 Jan 2024, 22:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wish You Were Here
Replies: 7
Views: 1845

Re: Wish You Were Here

Thanks, Frank, but I like it the way it is.
by Billy
29 Dec 2023, 23:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wish You Were Here
Replies: 7
Views: 1845

Re: Wish You Were Here

Thanks, Bob, I was invoking Emily consciously.
by Billy
29 Dec 2023, 22:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wish You Were Here
Replies: 7
Views: 1845

Wish You Were Here

Wish You Were Here

Clouds obscure the sun
this winter morning.
Bright days to come.

I learned my lesson.
Age and honesty
will do that,
hope it's not too late.
I'm counting on spring.

Hope is green,
and that lone, bedraggled
sparrow on a barren limb
chirping his heart out
for anyone to hear.