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- 15 Mar 2019, 21:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whistler's Mother
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16441
Re: Whistler's Mother
Tweaked S3...thx, Michael
- 15 Mar 2019, 20:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Salmon Run - revised
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19965
Re: Salmon Run
Some excellent thoughts, guys... thank you... I will make adjustments... Frank, like especially the “pebbled shallows”
- 15 Mar 2019, 06:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whistler's Mother
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16441
Re: Whistler's Mother
You’re right. They’re good suggestions... I will take advantage... thx, Billy, for confirmation
- 14 Mar 2019, 22:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Salmon Run - revised
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19965
Salmon Run - revised
V3: Salmon Run He squirms under fallen branches leaps over toppled trees his gills burning as he hurdles over boulders his hump slicing the water as eagles' talons like trawling hooks skim the surface all while females at the run's end scoop redds in the riffle dropping their roe in pebbled shallows...
- 14 Mar 2019, 20:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whistler's Mother
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16441
Re: Whistler's Mother
Thanks, Michael, especially for the time to make suggestions. Bob
- 14 Mar 2019, 20:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Shed
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7625
Re: Shed
I agree with everything Kenneth said. Excellent poem....the descriptions put you right there in the shed.
- 13 Mar 2019, 21:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: History By A Lesser Known
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16470
Re: History By A Lesser Known
This is a good, dramatic story to pursue. However, don't just tell us about the protests, the bloodshedding, etc. Put us in the middle of a protest. Make us feel it. Make us see it. The "Go Away" slogan being shouted is good. Extend...give us more pictures. There is too much violence in our daily li...
- 13 Mar 2019, 09:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Tired of Winning
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9881
Re: Tired of Winning
I like the first stanza best....a subtle parallel with Mussolini might be a good approach to explore... political poems are incredibly difficult to make work....I admire your ambition They love his Mussolini pout, his windswept hair that flaps in the wind. They love his weaving hands that move sensu...
- 12 Mar 2019, 20:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whistler's Mother
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16441
Re: Whistler's Mother
Meenas, Frank - thank you. Frank, I will think about your suggestion...thx for making it
- 11 Mar 2019, 23:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Butterfly Effect Letter
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14590
Re: Butterfly Effect Letter
Terrific poem... metaphor extended throughout... and that closing line is to die for... wonderful imaginative piece
- 11 Mar 2019, 20:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whistler's Mother
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16441
Re: Whistler's Mother
Thank you, Ken, for saying that... many thanks
- 10 Mar 2019, 22:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whistler's Mother
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16441
Whistler's Mother
V2: Whistler's Mother Who would have thought a simple woman from Paterson would live on in the Musée d'Orsay? When the painting was first unveiled the critics were outraged as if their own sister had posed nude in a brothel. Some wag chirped her son must have positioned me that way to avoid gazing a...
- 10 Mar 2019, 22:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15643
Re: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
Thanks, Michael, for your thoughts
- 08 Mar 2019, 04:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Trysting with Morpheus (rev 1)
- Replies: 12
- Views: 20647
Re: Morpheus' Tryst
This is close... there’s plenty to like, you paint a good scene. The tantalizingly tender and titillations lines aren’t needed. I like the warbler image, and might end the poem there. The last stanza is flat. Maybe you could either merge it with the previous stanza, but close on the warbler image or...
- 08 Mar 2019, 04:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15643
Re: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
Eira, Billy — thank you so much for your comments
- 05 Mar 2019, 00:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15643
- 04 Mar 2019, 21:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Between Seasons (edit spangled paradise)
- Replies: 24
- Views: 35728
Re: Between Seasons (edit spangled paradise)
Liked the change
- 04 Mar 2019, 21:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Last Supper (revised)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11367
Re: Last Supper
Liked it...
- 28 Feb 2019, 21:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7992
Re: A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story
Really nice flow and rhythm... especially liked
yet I thrust my nose forward,
to make good my nautical grades
yet I thrust my nose forward,
to make good my nautical grades
- 28 Feb 2019, 21:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Only Slept There
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11099
Re: In My Room As Little As Possible
Good one... loved this;
I lived on the outskirts
of their lives
I lived on the outskirts
of their lives
- 27 Feb 2019, 21:26
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2019:
- Replies: 15
- Views: 32413
Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2019:
I am not eligible this month but I gladly nominate Eira’s “Between Seasons”, Kenneth’s “Marooned” and Billy’s “ the music of minutes...”, excellent poems in a very good month of work at WB.
- 26 Feb 2019, 00:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15643
Re: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
Thanks, Ken
- 26 Feb 2019, 00:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Remembering Eddie Haskell
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7702
Re: Remembering Eddie Haskell
Terrific! The voice is strong and believable, the era and its dark side captured beautifully
- 26 Feb 2019, 00:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kalaupapa revised
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13114
Re: Kalaupapa revised
I agree... this is good
- 25 Feb 2019, 22:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paul Gauguin on Atuona - revised
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15643