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- 16 Dec 2023, 01:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: All Things Are Crooked (version 2, with small cuts)
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5790
Re: All Things Are Crooked (version 2, with small cuts)
I tend to agree with Bob, it is unnecessary wordy, something Bob points out in my work pretty regularly. I've known Bob for a number of years and he is the least offensive poet on here. As a draft it's okay, but you could cut. How you cut is up to you. I don't think the guy in the poem was being off...
- 15 Dec 2023, 15:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Camille at Asile de Montdevergues
- Replies: 13
- Views: 14939
Re: Camille at Asile de Montdevergues
I have edited, Caleb to meet with your observations.
- 15 Dec 2023, 13:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Camille at Asile de Montdevergues
- Replies: 13
- Views: 14939
Re: Camile at Asile de Montdevergues
Thanks, Caleb, good critique. I may adjust, runs away vs hops away. I can't see her hopping though. Lunatic is a lunatic is a lunatic, I'm not into woke. I may suffer for that. I agree on the weak line 'alas not to be' Who is it line, I did have a photograph of her sculpture of a huge black beast wi...
- 15 Dec 2023, 13:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to My Eyebrows
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3804
Re: Ode to My Eyebrows
The world can be changed by force, obviously. Caleb's poem is trying to show that even though his strength is fading as N grows older yet he retains certain aspects and still has the ability in some way to change events for the better. Bob has reminded me with his post, I should have welcomed you he...
- 15 Dec 2023, 05:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Watching YouTube Videos
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3755
Re: Watching YouTube Videos
I will trim it, Bog. It is wordy.
- 15 Dec 2023, 05:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to My Eyebrows
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3804
Re: Ode to My Eyebrows
I get it.
We are forever young despite somethings not working
as they should. Words can influence more in the aged
that a super fit body and athlete's pace.
We are forever young despite somethings not working
as they should. Words can influence more in the aged
that a super fit body and athlete's pace.
- 15 Dec 2023, 05:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Discontent Body
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3602
Re: Discontent Body
I know the feeling.
- 11 Dec 2023, 12:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Emma
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1986
Re: Emma
Is the oxymoron intentional in L1, Bob? possibly for effect. Maybe: Tom's ardour had cooled like the dying embers of a furnace Emma moved to sleep in the attic bed Cold up there but acceptable pure like winter snow Good to see you still posting Bob when most seem to have drifted away. I invite peopl...
- 09 Dec 2023, 03:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Choux à la crème
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4526
Re: Choux à la crème
Yes, I was overweight, It took about two years
- 07 Dec 2023, 13:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Choux à la crème
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4526
Re: Choux à la crème
Sad poem about a sad situation.
I lost four stone recently just be giving up sugar.
I lost four stone recently just be giving up sugar.
- 07 Dec 2023, 13:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Watching YouTube Videos
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3755
Re: Watching YouTube Videos
I guess I'll never be a regular poet Bob.
I'll try to apply what you teach me all the time.
Thanks old buddy.
I'll try to apply what you teach me all the time.
Thanks old buddy.
- 06 Dec 2023, 15:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Watching YouTube Videos
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3755
Watching YouTube Videos
I’ve been watching YouTube videos of shaper machines, and fallen in love with them all over again. It’s hard to write a poem about a shaper When one knows most don’t know what it is It is of course a big cast iron object weighing up to a ton on occasions, but there are little ones too. It can be des...
- 02 Dec 2023, 05:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for submission
- Replies: 1
- Views: 2014
Removed for submission
Removed for submission
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- 02 Dec 2023, 03:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Poems at The Wise Owl
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1513
Re: Poems at The Wise Owl
I was taken by how brilliant the layout and the fonts Bob, I really think it enhances the poems.
- 02 Dec 2023, 02:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Poems at The Wise Owl
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1513
Re: Poems at The Wise Owl
Well done Bob, great honour. It is a well designed website.
I am in with the January 2024 edition, not December 2023.
I am in with the January 2024 edition, not December 2023.
- 23 Nov 2023, 17:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Camille at Asile de Montdevergues
- Replies: 13
- Views: 14939
Re: Camile at Asile de Montdevergues
Well done, Bob.
- 22 Nov 2023, 14:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Camille at Asile de Montdevergues
- Replies: 13
- Views: 14939
Re: Camile at Asile de Montdevergues
Thanks Bob. I didn't mean to post this, Bob.
It's can old one. But when I saw it again and read it I said
What the heck. I do enjoy reading it myself.
It's can old one. But when I saw it again and read it I said
What the heck. I do enjoy reading it myself.
- 22 Nov 2023, 14:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Red Robe
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2352
Re: Red Robe
It's too obtuse for me. I didn't get it until Bob explained in his post. Does poetry have to be an enigma. Bukowski came out and just said it straight too in-your-face straight and crude with it, filthy crude, not that I'm advocating crude poetry. He has a large following now he's passed over, or as...
- 21 Nov 2023, 00:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Camille at Asile de Montdevergues
- Replies: 13
- Views: 14939
- 18 Nov 2023, 04:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One of a Thousand Drunken Nights
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3935
Re: One of a Thousand Drunken Nights
The photo shows all eight of us. All dead except me and Ron.
- 18 Nov 2023, 04:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One of a Thousand Drunken Nights
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3935
Re: One of a Thousand Drunken Nights
I've put it out Bob. Fingers crossed.
- 17 Nov 2023, 17:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One of a Thousand Drunken Nights
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3935
Re: One of a Thousand Drunken Nights
Edited, I tried to put a photo on as it gives a sense to the poem but failed.
I'd spelled jeans as genes.
I'd spelled jeans as genes.
- 17 Nov 2023, 01:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Old Age Sex
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5002
Re: Old Age Sex
Well, I thought I was agreeing with you. I mean so many people think old people should be put down let alone have sex. I think it is hot, sex is hot. Sex is healing and age doesn't come into it when two people love each other. Maybe I said it all wrong. I actually enjoyed the poem. Going off to find...
- 17 Nov 2023, 01:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Common House Sparrow
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4529
Re: The Common House Sparrow
Cats maybe, cuddly but they spoil the lawn and torment birds.
- 16 Nov 2023, 15:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bipolar Man
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2062
Re: Bipolar
Done, thanks Bob.