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- 01 Feb 2024, 08:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Big Shot
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1146
The Big Shot
The Big Shot Haydn sits primly on the side, never a hair out of place on his powdered wig. Everyone admires the Master. The old man takes to flattery like a horse to a bucket of oats! That is why he wants me to sign my scores "Ludwig, Pupil of Haydn" ....I refuse! How often has he cut our lessons sh...
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Dream at the Beach
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1086
Re: A Dream at the Beach
I like your edits, Billy
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dervish Dance
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1310
Re: Dervish Dance
I love this poem. Maybe it’s partly because it’s nostalgic for me. But, also, it’s cause I love the N’s voice. And I wholeheartedly agree with that last line. Another good one, Billy
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Beatles in India
- Replies: 2
- Views: 5777
- 29 Jan 2024, 07:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Reader
- Replies: 2
- Views: 820
Re: The Reader
Thanks for commenting.
- 29 Jan 2024, 06:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Changing World
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1098
Re: The Changing World
Thanks for the comment. To me it isn’t clear that it is satire. Perhaps it will be to others. Nevertheless, good flow and metrics.
- 29 Jan 2024, 00:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Reader
- Replies: 2
- Views: 820
The Reader
The Reader Sitting in the passenger's bucket seat
with her brown ringlets of hair
like Elizabeth Browning
she bent over a book. We pulled up to the drive-thru. "You want a shake or soda?
" She shook off my question. "Do you like music?" I asked,
straining like a man at his oars,
the waves kick...
- 28 Jan 2024, 23:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Changing World
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1098
Re: The Changing World
No, I didn’t read it as mocking transgender people. Quite the opposite.
Didn’t you say that you were gay? If so, why would you mock someone who is transgender?
Didn’t you say that you were gay? If so, why would you mock someone who is transgender?
- 28 Jan 2024, 03:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Changing World
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1098
Re: The Changing World
Very nice! I love the warmth, humor and humanity of this. Lovely flow and sonics as well. The metrics are good. Your best piece so far.
Was that a pink bow I saw in their scraggly beard?
If I see them again, I’ll give them the hug
I should have given them the first time.
Was that a pink bow I saw in their scraggly beard?
If I see them again, I’ll give them the hug
I should have given them the first time.
- 19 Jan 2024, 22:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Archiving Colonization
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1737
Re: Archiving Colonization
Yes. And maybe say or hint why the bear girl intrigues the N. Something that tells us about the N’s character? Maybe describe her clothes, which show her love for India’s culture? Maybe her sense of value, her loss at having something personal stolen from her in the past? I’m just thinking off the t...
- 18 Jan 2024, 21:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Archiving Colonization
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1737
Re: Archiving Colonization
Love the last 3 lines….
Do you need a comma after “locals”?
Knowing more about the N might make the poem more enjoyable.
Do you need a comma after “locals”?
Knowing more about the N might make the poem more enjoyable.
- 18 Jan 2024, 07:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: God Lives (version 3)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1985
Re: God Lives (new ending)
Better. It works.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5617
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Thank you, Billy. I appreciate it.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Siberia
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2313
Re: My Siberia
The sense of numbing, brutal cold really comes through here. I admire your wide range of topics. Winter is handled by other poets so differently. Damn good poem.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Publication announcements
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2485
Re: Publication announcements
Congrats!
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5617
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Thanks, Caleb
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: God Lives (version 3)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1985
Re: God Lives
Nicely done. Just a nit… you don’t need “for me” in the next to last line. And I’m with Billy… the last line seems off, for some reason…I can’t tell you why. Otherwise everything works well.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: blackberry pie
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2164
Re: blackberry pie
Great slice of life…. Brings back the nostalgia of my youth….
- 17 Jan 2024, 03:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Publication announcements
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2485
Re: Publication announcements
You misunderstood. You’re welcome to post about publications. I sometimes post. Ieuan does as well.
- 16 Jan 2024, 23:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5617
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Tweaked, since this poem didn't receive any comments....thx for any input
- 16 Jan 2024, 23:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1929
Re: Rejections
I have revised the poem, Michael. Thx again for your help.
- 16 Jan 2024, 22:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Publication announcements
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2485
Re: Publication announcements
If you want to, of course. Go to Writer’s Block - Where the Poets Hang, click on New Topic and post your announcement.
- 16 Jan 2024, 06:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1416
Re: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
Thanks for the explanation
- 15 Jan 2024, 22:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1416
Re: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
Good poem! It’s different and it never crosses the line of either melodrama or self pity.
I like the ending, but why Millay? Wikipedia just told me she died falling down a staircase after suffering a heart attack.
I like the ending, but why Millay? Wikipedia just told me she died falling down a staircase after suffering a heart attack.
- 15 Jan 2024, 22:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1929
Re: Rejections
I like your suggestions, Michael. I will revise accordingly.