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by BobBradshaw
29 Jul 2019, 08:48
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming August IBPC 2019:
Replies: 15
Views: 28160

Re: Upcoming August IBPC 2019:

I nominate Billy's "It'll Grow Back", Eira's "The Owl and the Blackbird" and Kenneth's "Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace"
by BobBradshaw
28 Jul 2019, 20:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Last Game of the Season
Replies: 11
Views: 16707

Re: Last Game of the Season

Thank you, Ken. I would appreciate the nom.
by BobBradshaw
27 Jul 2019, 22:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ten Thousand Ways to Die by Water
Replies: 2
Views: 5852

Re: Ten Thousand Ways to Die by Water

Good poem....especially liked the second stanza
by BobBradshaw
26 Jul 2019, 08:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Last Game of the Season
Replies: 11
Views: 16707

Re: Last Game of the Season

Thanks, Ken....I'll think about sending it out, and let you know....thx again
by BobBradshaw
26 Jul 2019, 07:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Last Game of the Season
Replies: 11
Views: 16707

Re: Last Game of the Season

Thanks, Ken... so glad to see your remarks! A nom is appreciated; this month has a number of worthy postings.... including your Sandberg poem, Eira’s piece, Billy’s poem, Meenas’ poem... just to name some off the top of my head
by BobBradshaw
25 Jul 2019, 20:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Last Game of the Season
Replies: 11
Views: 16707

Last Game of the Season

v2: Last Game of the Season Under high clouds we wave our thunder sticks. I recall biking to this stadium as a kid, the air stuttering from baseball cards pinned to my spokes. When the team won it was like the clouds parting, an omen of good things to come... The game is different now. I will never ...
by BobBradshaw
25 Jul 2019, 09:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Window Into the Mind
Replies: 1
Views: 5849

Re: Mansions of the Mind

Sometimes more is more. I like the tone. But as a reader new to your work, I would ask who is Em? Why is she seeing a psychologist? How are Em and Ieuan related? Adding some background would help.
by BobBradshaw
23 Jul 2019, 07:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Partnering
Replies: 7
Views: 12612

Re: Partnering

Michael came up with the ballet reference...thanks, Michael
by BobBradshaw
23 Jul 2019, 07:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Owl and the Blackbird (revision 1)
Replies: 14
Views: 22747

Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

A fun poem... charmed
by BobBradshaw
22 Jul 2019, 20:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Partnering
Replies: 7
Views: 12612

Re: Partnering

Thank you again, Michael. Eira, Meenas, I appreciate your fondness for this.
by BobBradshaw
21 Jul 2019, 20:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Partnering
Replies: 7
Views: 12612

Re: Mating Flamingos

I really like your ideas, Michael. "Partnering" for the title sounds good. I like your opening a lot...question, should it be pose en pointe or pose en pointe a la pirouette? I also find the little black dress intriguing, but can't decide if it works better or not. Thank you for your work...your ide...
by BobBradshaw
21 Jul 2019, 09:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Partnering
Replies: 7
Views: 12612

Partnering

v2: Partnering Dressed in tutus of sumptuous oranges, reds and pinks, the ladies pose en pointe à la pirouette as if photographers were hidden in the rushes. They promenade gracefully, like the rich at country clubs wanting to be noticed. These flamingos rest, wade, glide between appetizers of shrim...
by BobBradshaw
19 Jul 2019, 22:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kadaneri Ayyanar
Replies: 6
Views: 11491

Re: Kadaneri Ayyanar

I like many of the details, as here: Residing in a small temple in the middle of sparse vegetation where Banyan and Palmyrah trees render life but the poem would be better if you trimmed out the telling lines, and left the details to render the emotions....an example of telling: An experience quaint...
by BobBradshaw
19 Jul 2019, 06:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace
Replies: 6
Views: 10951

Re: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace

The more I read this, the more I love it. Especially the last 2 stanzas... but I like all of it except for the Gloria Patti reference. I googled but couldn’t find a Gloria Patti. I like the line about Sandburg preaching to the goats. A very strong poem...
One typo: creak s/b creek
by BobBradshaw
18 Jul 2019, 20:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Church of Pain V2
Replies: 7
Views: 12142

Re: Church of Pain

Sorry, I don’t know how to read this... I get the satiric last line, but not the other ones.
by BobBradshaw
17 Jul 2019, 00:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: It’ll Grow Back
Replies: 5
Views: 10832

Re: It’ll Grow Back

I like this humorous take. Delightful
by BobBradshaw
17 Jul 2019, 00:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kite Flying
Replies: 4
Views: 8049

Re: Kite Flying

I have removed the radio stanza...
by BobBradshaw
16 Jul 2019, 20:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kite Flying
Replies: 4
Views: 8049

Re: Kite Flying

Kenneth, thanks much...I will consider the radio line and how to replace it.

Billy, thanks too
by BobBradshaw
15 Jul 2019, 21:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kite Flying
Replies: 4
Views: 8049

Kite Flying

Kite Flying It’s kite flying I enjoy most, running with you through parks. You fly ahead as if scouting the next turn in our path while I shout your name, trying to rein you in. In a sudden sigh you fall, exasperated by my inability to keep up--whether it’s jogging or trying to follow you on flute. ...
by BobBradshaw
15 Jul 2019, 20:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Song of the Drowned
Replies: 3
Views: 7120

Re: Song of the Drowned

Wonderful...what an unusual poem and approach....
by BobBradshaw
15 Jul 2019, 20:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Our Parents
Replies: 3
Views: 7591

Re: Our Parents

You're right, Ken. Thanks for letting me know.
by BobBradshaw
13 Jul 2019, 08:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Our Parents
Replies: 3
Views: 7591

Our Parents

Our Parents Mom knew where she was headed, as confident as a song bird. She was an office on a top floor, and breathtaking views. Mom was too busy for us, a vice presidential firefly in a field lit with fireworks and sparklers. We turned to Dad when we felt lonely or overwhelmed. He was never too bu...
by BobBradshaw
08 Jul 2019, 22:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
Replies: 6
Views: 13465

Re: Iron Ore Miner (1859)

I love the storyteller’s voice. his rhythms and images. What the poem needs is a clear way of flowing the different asides together. Many stanzas feel like standalone short poems, with excellent writing, but they don’t build toward an inevitable close. References are picked up and dropped—like the s...
by BobBradshaw
08 Jul 2019, 03:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: #revolutionarywarstory
Replies: 4
Views: 8658

Re: #revolutionarywarstory

Clever...fun
by BobBradshaw
07 Jul 2019, 06:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
Replies: 7
Views: 14018

Re: Children from a Burn Ward Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium

Thx, Ken, I appreciate your optimism and support