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- 29 Jul 2019, 08:48
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming August IBPC 2019:
- Replies: 15
- Views: 28160
Re: Upcoming August IBPC 2019:
I nominate Billy's "It'll Grow Back", Eira's "The Owl and the Blackbird" and Kenneth's "Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace"
- 28 Jul 2019, 20:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Last Game of the Season
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16707
Re: Last Game of the Season
Thank you, Ken. I would appreciate the nom.
- 27 Jul 2019, 22:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ten Thousand Ways to Die by Water
- Replies: 2
- Views: 5852
Re: Ten Thousand Ways to Die by Water
Good poem....especially liked the second stanza
- 26 Jul 2019, 08:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Last Game of the Season
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16707
Re: Last Game of the Season
Thanks, Ken....I'll think about sending it out, and let you know....thx again
- 26 Jul 2019, 07:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Last Game of the Season
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16707
Re: Last Game of the Season
Thanks, Ken... so glad to see your remarks! A nom is appreciated; this month has a number of worthy postings.... including your Sandberg poem, Eira’s piece, Billy’s poem, Meenas’ poem... just to name some off the top of my head
- 25 Jul 2019, 20:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Last Game of the Season
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16707
Last Game of the Season
v2: Last Game of the Season Under high clouds we wave our thunder sticks. I recall biking to this stadium as a kid, the air stuttering from baseball cards pinned to my spokes. When the team won it was like the clouds parting, an omen of good things to come... The game is different now. I will never ...
- 25 Jul 2019, 09:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Window Into the Mind
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5849
Re: Mansions of the Mind
Sometimes more is more. I like the tone. But as a reader new to your work, I would ask who is Em? Why is she seeing a psychologist? How are Em and Ieuan related? Adding some background would help.
- 23 Jul 2019, 07:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Partnering
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12612
Re: Partnering
Michael came up with the ballet reference...thanks, Michael
- 23 Jul 2019, 07:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Owl and the Blackbird (revision 1)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 22747
Re: The Owl and the Blackbird
A fun poem... charmed
- 22 Jul 2019, 20:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Partnering
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12612
Re: Partnering
Thank you again, Michael. Eira, Meenas, I appreciate your fondness for this.
- 21 Jul 2019, 20:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Partnering
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12612
Re: Mating Flamingos
I really like your ideas, Michael. "Partnering" for the title sounds good. I like your opening a lot...question, should it be pose en pointe or pose en pointe a la pirouette? I also find the little black dress intriguing, but can't decide if it works better or not. Thank you for your work...your ide...
- 21 Jul 2019, 09:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Partnering
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12612
Partnering
v2: Partnering Dressed in tutus of sumptuous oranges, reds and pinks, the ladies pose en pointe à la pirouette as if photographers were hidden in the rushes. They promenade gracefully, like the rich at country clubs wanting to be noticed. These flamingos rest, wade, glide between appetizers of shrim...
- 19 Jul 2019, 22:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kadaneri Ayyanar
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11491
Re: Kadaneri Ayyanar
I like many of the details, as here: Residing in a small temple in the middle of sparse vegetation where Banyan and Palmyrah trees render life but the poem would be better if you trimmed out the telling lines, and left the details to render the emotions....an example of telling: An experience quaint...
- 19 Jul 2019, 06:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10951
Re: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace
The more I read this, the more I love it. Especially the last 2 stanzas... but I like all of it except for the Gloria Patti reference. I googled but couldn’t find a Gloria Patti. I like the line about Sandburg preaching to the goats. A very strong poem...
One typo: creak s/b creek
One typo: creak s/b creek
- 18 Jul 2019, 20:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Church of Pain V2
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12142
Re: Church of Pain
Sorry, I don’t know how to read this... I get the satiric last line, but not the other ones.
- 17 Jul 2019, 00:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: It’ll Grow Back
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10832
Re: It’ll Grow Back
I like this humorous take. Delightful
- 17 Jul 2019, 00:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kite Flying
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8049
Re: Kite Flying
I have removed the radio stanza...
- 16 Jul 2019, 20:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kite Flying
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8049
Re: Kite Flying
Kenneth, thanks much...I will consider the radio line and how to replace it.
Billy, thanks too
Billy, thanks too
- 15 Jul 2019, 21:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kite Flying
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8049
Kite Flying
Kite Flying It’s kite flying I enjoy most, running with you through parks. You fly ahead as if scouting the next turn in our path while I shout your name, trying to rein you in. In a sudden sigh you fall, exasperated by my inability to keep up--whether it’s jogging or trying to follow you on flute. ...
- 15 Jul 2019, 20:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Song of the Drowned
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7120
Re: Song of the Drowned
Wonderful...what an unusual poem and approach....
- 15 Jul 2019, 20:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Our Parents
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7591
Re: Our Parents
You're right, Ken. Thanks for letting me know.
- 13 Jul 2019, 08:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Our Parents
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7591
Our Parents
Our Parents Mom knew where she was headed, as confident as a song bird. She was an office on a top floor, and breathtaking views. Mom was too busy for us, a vice presidential firefly in a field lit with fireworks and sparklers. We turned to Dad when we felt lonely or overwhelmed. He was never too bu...
- 08 Jul 2019, 22:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
- Replies: 6
- Views: 13465
Re: Iron Ore Miner (1859)
I love the storyteller’s voice. his rhythms and images. What the poem needs is a clear way of flowing the different asides together. Many stanzas feel like standalone short poems, with excellent writing, but they don’t build toward an inevitable close. References are picked up and dropped—like the s...
- 08 Jul 2019, 03:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: #revolutionarywarstory
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8658
Re: #revolutionarywarstory
Clever...fun
- 07 Jul 2019, 06:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
- Replies: 7
- Views: 14018
Re: Children from a Burn Ward Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
Thx, Ken, I appreciate your optimism and support