Thanks for the nom, Bob. I can accept.
I second Siva's 'Paperfall' and nominate Bob's 'Laika' and Bob's 'Man on the Moon'(can't chose between them )
Eira
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- 04 Mar 2020, 20:52
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 9
- Views: 22683
- 20 Feb 2020, 01:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
- Replies: 18
- Views: 34200
- 20 Feb 2020, 01:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
- Replies: 18
- Views: 34200
Re: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
Thanks for sharing that Michael.
Eira
Eira
- 20 Feb 2020, 01:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
- Replies: 18
- Views: 34200
Re: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
Thanks for your suggestions, Bob. I've made some changes.
Eira
Eira
- 20 Feb 2020, 01:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Man on Moon
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17189
Re: Man on Moon
Thumbs up to discovered at the end - share would have a different intent.
Eira
Eira
- 15 Feb 2020, 23:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
- Replies: 18
- Views: 34200
Re: Found you Again on Facebook (revision)
I just found the original of this under a different name. It was a very detailed poem but I've included some of the details in this version as I felt it needed filling out a bit.
- 15 Feb 2020, 23:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12155
Re: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
Bob has given some great suggestions here, Siva. I look forward to your revision. I like this very much.
Eira
Eira
- 15 Feb 2020, 23:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nestling (rev2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 19533
Re: The Nestling (rev2)
No problem Siva - I just didn't want to break any rulesSivaRamanathan wrote: ↑02 Feb 2020, 20:43Eira
I seconded.I thought it was understood. Wish you all the best.Though I did not comment I have been following your revisions,which is a good exercise.
Siva
Eira
- 15 Feb 2020, 23:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Laika
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12744
Re: Laika, First Dog on Space
As a dog lover I was very moved by this, Bob. I'm surprised I hadn't given the situation more thought before. As humans we have a choice in what we do, but not so animals. The only suggestion I can make is 'my heart shaking '. Is this the right description? On feeling apprehensive I would think a he...
- 02 Feb 2020, 02:45
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 14
- Views: 29428
Re: Upcoming February IBPC 2020:
This hasn't been seconded but Bob said I should post it here - so here goes! Eira Needham presentideaseira@hotmail.com My original and unpublished work, not representing any other board. The Nestling Hunched over the breathless body tumbled from its sycamore cradle, her mind takes flight. He arrived...
- 02 Feb 2020, 02:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nestling (rev2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 19533
Re: The Nestling (rev2)
Thanks Bob, I didn't realise it had been seconded
- 31 Jan 2020, 02:58
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 14
- Views: 29428
Re: Upcoming February IBPC 2020:
Thanks Bob
I second Siva's 'Black as the coal workers and nominate Bob's 'Sleeping on a Roof'
Eira'
I second Siva's 'Black as the coal workers and nominate Bob's 'Sleeping on a Roof'
Eira'
- 29 Jan 2020, 03:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
- Replies: 10
- Views: 19130
Re: Sleeping on a Roof
I'd like to nominate this one, Bob, unless there is another you'd prefer to go.
Eira
Eira
- 29 Jan 2020, 03:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nestling (rev2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 19533
Re: The Nestling
Eira, let me know whether you would like this poem or the Christmas poem nominated.... Thanks Bob. My Christmas poem went in November (although it has been revised recently) I think I'll hold onto it and send it off somewhere nearer next Xmas. This poem would be better. I have been looking at it ag...
- 27 Jan 2020, 03:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nestling (rev2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 19533
Re: The Nestling
Good catch, Bob, I have rearranged those 2 stanzas which seems to help.BobBradshaw wrote: ↑26 Jan 2020, 10:22I like the metaphor. This poignant and unusual story works....nit: I don't know if you need entwined and wrapped both.
Eira
- 27 Jan 2020, 03:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
- Replies: 10
- Views: 19130
Re: Sleeping on a Roof
Perfect!
- 26 Jan 2020, 03:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Christmas Remembrance (revision 3)
- Replies: 13
- Views: 26185
Re: Christmas Remembrance (revision 3)
I couldn't resist another revision
- 26 Jan 2020, 03:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nestling (rev2)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 19533
The Nestling (rev2)
The Nestling (revision 2) Hunched over the breathless body tumbled from its sycamore cradle, her mind takes flight. He arrived quietly, entwined. Voices hushed, they rushed him away in a hospital blanket. One glimpse no caress no goodbye The attic keeps her secret for forty years, a white shawl fold...
- 26 Jan 2020, 02:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Black as the coal workers, soot collects in her hair.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 16763
Re: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.
Great revision, Siva and a fascinating poem.
I love 'the rain coughed' - such a good description.
'I saw my tiny grandchild praying to the iron box.' makes the poem so personal.
Good ending.
Eira
I love 'the rain coughed' - such a good description.
'I saw my tiny grandchild praying to the iron box.' makes the poem so personal.
Good ending.
Eira
- 26 Jan 2020, 01:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
- Replies: 10
- Views: 19130
Re: Sleeping on a Roof
Hi Bob, Brilliant poem - unusual topic. I feel it might need a little trim in parts - a few suggestions below (only if they suit your intentions.) She brought me home from a reading, saying no poet should sleep so rough then [she] trimmed my long hair, [her] scissors striding expertly. Personally, ...
- 05 Jan 2020, 23:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Postcard (new title for Escape from Routine plus revision)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15035
Re: Escape from Routine
Thanks Bob!
- 05 Jan 2020, 23:35
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 13
- Views: 28933
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Thanks Bob & Michael. This is my unpublished poem; my email is presentideaseira@hotmail.com. I am not representing any other forum. Escape from routine Rhythmically humming, the washer tumbles dolphin towels with multicoloured swimwear. On top, a plastic pail of gulfweed gathered for grandma’s achin...
- 31 Dec 2019, 04:11
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 13
- Views: 28933
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Bob's 'Coming Back' and Siva's 'Marakuli'. I am still considering a third.
Eira
Eira
- 27 Dec 2019, 03:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28163
Re: Chicken Soup In Times of Disaster
Hi Bob, I'm never too clever with titles. If you keep the present one, then a question mark at the end. Is There A Chicken Soup That Can Save Me? Now you mention it, I think st 1&2 could be deleted - stanza 2 certainly could. I still like St 1, but this could be trimmed back to I have become a strip...
- 23 Dec 2019, 05:31
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Poems that placed in the December IBPC 2019 (Congrats, Bob)
- Replies: 1
- Views: 9651
Re: Poems that placed in the December IBPC 2019 (Congrats, Bob)
Well done, Bob -Kenneth too!
Eira
Eira