Thank you Ken. I was just repeating stories I'd heard - tried not to be over emotional.
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Thank you Ken. I was just repeating stories I'd heard - tried not to be over emotional.
Have deleted last stanzaKenneth2816 wrote: ↑28 Aug 2019, 22:22Eira. This is a warm, inviting poem
Since you have Facebook in the title, I concur about ending with launch or change the wording
Yes, I suppose the last stanza is not neededBobBradshaw wrote: ↑28 Aug 2019, 19:37Lovely, warmhearted poem....I would end the poem on "paunch".
It is memories, SivaSivaRamanathan wrote: ↑28 Aug 2019, 05:08Liked reading this.Till the logging out, everything sounds as if it is a face to face recognition.
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It is memories, SivaSivaRamanathan wrote: ↑28 Aug 2019, 05:08Liked reading this.Till the logging out, everything sounds as if it is a face to face recognition.
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Thanks Bob for pointing out the line you liked.BobBradshaw wrote: ↑25 Aug 2019, 19:52I echo the others... well done...especially liked “breath held until gasping”
Thanks for your comments, Ken. This one was a lot longer originally, so I'm glad the tightening has worked.Kenneth2816 wrote: ↑25 Aug 2019, 13:58I think you do a good job in a few lines. Good example of show, don't tell.
Thanks Meena - glad you enjoyed
Thanks Bob - enjoyed writing this one
Sorry to be late answering - glad you enjoyed, Frank