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- 29 Aug 2019, 20:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: We Are Here For You
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8710
Re: We Are Here For You
Lovely! Change "cuddles" to "curdles" and you're done...a nom for sure
- 28 Aug 2019, 19:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: O Let us see Another Day
- Replies: 2
- Views: 7208
Re: [b]O Let us see Another Day[/b]
Enjoyed....I would take out the final good-bye line
- 28 Aug 2019, 19:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Found you Again on Facebook (revision 2)
- Replies: 18
- Views: 34147
Re: Found you Again on Facebook
Lovely, warmhearted poem....I would end the poem on "paunch".
- 27 Aug 2019, 19:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20690
Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Thank you, Ken...appreciate a nom
- 26 Aug 2019, 21:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20690
Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
A slight revision
- 26 Aug 2019, 19:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bull and the Chinaman
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9165
Re: Bull and the Chinaman
Yes, it did... nice poem
- 25 Aug 2019, 19:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bull and the Chinaman
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9165
Re: Bull and the Chinaman
Like the first 2 stanzas best...
- 25 Aug 2019, 19:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Loose Ends
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9046
Re: The Loose Ends
Great subject!!!! I love the 2nd stanza best... needs to be tweaked for a better flow... my only criticism... many good stanzas here... really like how they’re working together towards the close
- 25 Aug 2019, 19:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Son of a Preacher Man
- Replies: 12
- Views: 20536
Re: Son of a Preacher Man
I echo the others... well done...especially liked “breath held until gasping”
- 22 Aug 2019, 20:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "no deal is real" (celebrating a golden anniversary)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10617
Re: "no deal is real" (celebrating a golden anniversary)
Maybe a stretch, but quite enjoyable....brings back the days...sigh
- 22 Aug 2019, 20:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20690
Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
MIchael, Siva -- thank you
- 20 Aug 2019, 19:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Forty Eight Days After Forty Years-- Athi Varadar
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10515
Re: Forty Eight Days After Forty Years-- Athi Varadar
Love the close! Fab last line
- 20 Aug 2019, 04:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Houses
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8574
Re: Houses
Terrific, hard hitting poem about a bleak environment. Great close...
- 17 Aug 2019, 21:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Black Crow
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10700
Re: Black Crow
Fabulous. One of your best
- 11 Aug 2019, 20:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10980
Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings
Nice one
- 11 Aug 2019, 20:12
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Legality Whence?
- Replies: 6
- Views: 12405
Re: Legality Whence?
I agree with Ken. Those first 3 stanzas are the heart and soul of the poem...they’re very nice
- 10 Aug 2019, 22:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20690
Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Thanks, Meenas
- 08 Aug 2019, 07:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20690
Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne
Billy, thank you... I might send it out... something to think about
Ken... glad you enjoyed it
Ken... glad you enjoyed it
- 06 Aug 2019, 21:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Algernon Charles Swinburne
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20690
Algernon Charles Swinburne
V2: Algernon Charles Swinburne Lean like a flamingo, he boasted a cataract of red hair— but was just as famous for his drunken pratfalls, his poetry accused of being just as confused as he was when sloshing about a room spilling brandy or shrieking hysterically like a peacock. Yet he did have his fa...
- 06 Aug 2019, 20:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Golden Triangle
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9218
Re: Golden Triangle
Nicely done...love these lines: I think of the second, just out of court, update with phone calls, a check periodical nothing inf a taxation work goes fine. It is kind of having two spouses, each one in different countries, and with that I meet a third one, who turns irresistible. She is attractive ...
- 06 Aug 2019, 20:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: White Crow
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12849
Re: White Crow
I agree with Meenas...like that Picasso image best.
- 05 Aug 2019, 22:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Old Number One
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6055
Re: Old Number One
Sounds a bit Bernie-esque. Excellent images... loved the first 2 stanzas...all although I don’t know the reference to the pesos and coconuts. I like how you are telling everything strictly through imagery. The change in tone from the 2nd to the 3rd stanza is jolting but at the same time exhilarating...
- 05 Aug 2019, 22:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Living At The End Of The Road
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12950
Re: Living At The End Of The Road
I agree with Ken... the Van Gogh image is good but not for this poem. Save it for something else. Love the telephone pole. Good poem... but agree the end needs a better punch line.
- 05 Aug 2019, 20:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Not The Familiar Gautama
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9926
Re: Not The Familiar Gautama
A good subject...but tightening would help...as in these 3 lines...too telling...give us the same impression in an image or two...make us feel his mediocrity, his sense of failure. So look to tighten wherever you can...and dramatize the last 2 lines...using an image....something like? "...debris, di...
- 05 Aug 2019, 20:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Yanar Dag
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8183
Re: Yanar Dag
A fascinating and intriguing poem....the lines are well written, but I think the poem needs a narrator who makes us feel his vulnerability, or if he isn't vulnerable, makes it clear why this place is so meaningful to him personally