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- 19 Jan 2024, 22:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Archiving Colonization
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1682
Re: Archiving Colonization
Yes. And maybe say or hint why the bear girl intrigues the N. Something that tells us about the N’s character? Maybe describe her clothes, which show her love for India’s culture? Maybe her sense of value, her loss at having something personal stolen from her in the past? I’m just thinking off the t...
- 18 Jan 2024, 21:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Archiving Colonization
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1682
Re: Archiving Colonization
Love the last 3 lines….
Do you need a comma after “locals”?
Knowing more about the N might make the poem more enjoyable.
Do you need a comma after “locals”?
Knowing more about the N might make the poem more enjoyable.
- 18 Jan 2024, 07:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: God Lives (version 3)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1928
Re: God Lives (new ending)
Better. It works.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5562
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Thank you, Billy. I appreciate it.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Siberia
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2163
Re: My Siberia
The sense of numbing, brutal cold really comes through here. I admire your wide range of topics. Winter is handled by other poets so differently. Damn good poem.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Publication announcements
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2410
Re: Publication announcements
Congrats!
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5562
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Thanks, Caleb
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: God Lives (version 3)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1928
Re: God Lives
Nicely done. Just a nit… you don’t need “for me” in the next to last line. And I’m with Billy… the last line seems off, for some reason…I can’t tell you why. Otherwise everything works well.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: blackberry pie
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2114
Re: blackberry pie
Great slice of life…. Brings back the nostalgia of my youth….
- 17 Jan 2024, 03:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Publication announcements
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2410
Re: Publication announcements
You misunderstood. You’re welcome to post about publications. I sometimes post. Ieuan does as well.
- 16 Jan 2024, 23:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5562
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Tweaked, since this poem didn't receive any comments....thx for any input
- 16 Jan 2024, 23:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1897
Re: Rejections
I have revised the poem, Michael. Thx again for your help.
- 16 Jan 2024, 22:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Publication announcements
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2410
Re: Publication announcements
If you want to, of course. Go to Writer’s Block - Where the Poets Hang, click on New Topic and post your announcement.
- 16 Jan 2024, 06:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1357
Re: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
Thanks for the explanation
- 15 Jan 2024, 22:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1357
Re: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
Good poem! It’s different and it never crosses the line of either melodrama or self pity.
I like the ending, but why Millay? Wikipedia just told me she died falling down a staircase after suffering a heart attack.
I like the ending, but why Millay? Wikipedia just told me she died falling down a staircase after suffering a heart attack.
- 15 Jan 2024, 22:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1897
Re: Rejections
I like your suggestions, Michael. I will revise accordingly.
- 15 Jan 2024, 00:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1897
Re: Rejections
Thanks, Ieuan. It’s heartbreaking to see animals mistreated, and especially intelligent ones, including ones we share a lot of DNA with. It may be that all of life is intelligent, the differences being either a matter of degree or the type of intelligence testing being done. Even forms like slime mo...
- 14 Jan 2024, 22:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1897
Re: Rejections
Thanks for commenting
- 14 Jan 2024, 00:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2699
Re: The Nutritionist
I don’t have just one favorite, but I do have a soft spot for the light hearted “On a Grasshopper and Cricket”: The poetry of earth is never dead: When all the birds are faint with the hot sun, And hide in cooling trees, a voice will run From hedge to hedge about the new-mown mead; That is the Grass...
- 13 Jan 2024, 22:49
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Ieuan Published -AutumSkyPoetryDaily - In Love with Woman in her Later Years
- Replies: 19
- Views: 25963
Re: Ieuan - Published
I just read your poem at OpenArts… 'For Harmina In Love with a Woman in her Later Years'. It is even more beautiful than I recalled. What a loving tribute… you are blessed, my friend.
- 13 Jan 2024, 22:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1897
Rejections
V2: Desiring this man’s art and that man’s scope, With what I most enjoy contented least; Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising, Haply I think on thee, and then my state, (Like to the lark at break of day arising From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven’s gate; — William Shakespeare, sonnet ...
- 13 Jan 2024, 22:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: All Heart
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1318
Re: All Heart
I like the honesty of this. I like the words chosen to end lines on as well. I especially love that last line
I would replace “nigh” with near.
I would replace “nigh” with near.
- 13 Jan 2024, 04:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1288
Re: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
Ok, I was thinking you could develop more details about the planet, the environment, the women… And as you filled in your details, emphasize active verbs. E.g. take this description: “had died out caused by a virus that attacked the placenta.” More active verbs and details might be used: e.g., to “h...
- 13 Jan 2024, 01:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: In Love with a Woman in her Later Years
- Replies: 14
- Views: 8916
Re: In Love with a Woman in her Later Years
Congrats on the acceptances.
- 13 Jan 2024, 01:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1288
Re: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
Look to make the verbs more active, too. That’s something I need to work on as well.