"leading lady lifted from the machina"

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Michael (MV)
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"leading lady lifted from the machina"

#1 Post by Michael (MV) »

  

  We come to the Father by way of the Son
    but there is no son without the mother

         no moonlight without the sun
           (where you go I follow where you go)
                  out of this whirl

          how can brother-son be ruthless
                when Mother was given
                    the middle name


                               Ruth
 
  
              the night sky parts
                                               and the leading lady
                          like her rises
 
 
 
 

 
 
 

franklyfedup
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Re: "leading lady lifted from the machina"

#2 Post by franklyfedup »

I like these poems with the religion mystery buried deep so that no one can understand then unless they have studied the KJV for many long years. There can be no moonshine without the sun because the light comes from the sun, so obvious yet needs to be said to remind us and that is a great poetic device.

Moses followed the cloud by day and Elijah sought God in the whirlwind, but He was not there, He came as a still quiet voice. And then confusion, or is it my lack of knowledge. Is it Able and Cain the ruthless brother (Ruth less) or is it something else, and then it tapers off into a wilderness and sometimes I think I will never understand poetry.

Michael (MV)
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Re: "leading lady lifted from the machina"

#3 Post by Michael (MV) »

Hi Frank,


Hi Frank

I like "moonshine" - I 'll consider it - white lightning

high-proof distilled spirits


no moonshine without white lightning

moonshine & white lightning
proof of distilled spirits


Frank, Thanks for reading & commenting


:)

Michael (MV)

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