The Eunuch

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Kenneth2816
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The Eunuch

#1 Post by Kenneth2816 » 15 May 2019, 20:39

Starless night in Thebes, I caught him.
A slave-boy , attempting to flee
through the moon gate. I bound
him with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic, washed his body

with lime and pepper-water. He made
no sound at the blade. The names
of his unborn kiss my fingers
the way minnows announce
themselves in solitary bubbles
that break on the surface of a pond.

BobBradshaw
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Re: The Eunuch

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 16 May 2019, 00:09

Loved
Starless night in Thebes, I caught him.
A slave-boy , attempting to flee
through the moon gate. I bound
him with serpents, fed him Tuna
and honey-garlic, washed his body

with lime and pepper-water

I am intrigued but a bit lost with the serpents..are they chains in the shape of serpents?

Is the kiss the bleeding? Sorry I’m in a bit of a fog this morning

Kenneth2816
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Re: The Eunuch

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 16 May 2019, 00:51

Whatever works for you, works for me

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