Developments in a Dark Room

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BobBradshaw
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Developments in a Dark Room

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 22 Mar 2023, 04:29

Developments in a Dark Room


A tray of chemicals in a dark room
couldn’t have exposed love
any clearer than the moment I saw your face.

I didn’t study your portfolio or dive deep
into your past. I didn’t interview
old boyfriends or seek advice.

I didn’t have a checklist
for someone to fall in love with:
a woman with a dark storm of hair,

flashing eyes…olive skin,
someone who loves literature,
a woman as bright as light on water.

I saw you for the first time at dusk,
your face and the room softened
in the wash of shadows.

Was my love for you simply a matter
of brain chemicals--dopamine,
adrenaline, oxytocin?

On Saturn lightning can turn methane
into falling diamonds.
That's the way love was with us;

in a moment everything changed,
our hearts melded together
now for over 50 years

though I too give thanks
for what all lovers share:
the right chemistry.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Developments in a Dark Room

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 23 Mar 2023, 23:17

Another quaint and relatable extended metaphor.
Enjoyed

BobBradshaw
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Re: Developments in a Dark Room

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 24 Mar 2023, 20:21

Thanks, Ken

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Re: Developments in a Dark Room

#4 Post by IndianaDP » 26 Mar 2023, 18:17

Diamonds are a great metaphor for enduring love.
Enjoyed the poem, here’s to another fifty.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Developments in a Dark Room

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 31 Mar 2023, 03:53

Thanks, Dale

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Re: Developments in a Dark Room

#6 Post by Michael (MV) » 01 Apr 2023, 18:49

Hi Bob,

Workshop consider making that last line

the right chemistry

as the title.

Then finale as:

in a darkroom moment everything changed -
our hearts still developing together
now for over 50 years


😎

Michael (MV)

BobBradshaw
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Re: Developments in a Dark Room

#7 Post by BobBradshaw » 01 Apr 2023, 19:46

Thanks, Michael

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