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Judge

Judge me today
Judge me for yesterday
And tomorrow if I fall away
Kuz I’m not here to stay
Far from outer space I’m
Just visiting this great place
But if I fade from grace
Know there is a clean slate
A new page for each day
So I will close my eyes and pray
I can awake
On the other side
In a different time
Maybe I can find a better life
With a new name
Maybe I can change because
There is no place like home
That’s where I am going
Kuz I’m on my own
Oh lord please wait kuz
I’m on my way.

I reworked the first part, please tell me if it is more vivid/better than before. Thanks, every time

Judge

Judge me today
Judge me for yesterday
And tomorrow if I fall away
From your ever fading grace
Say it all
Speak in codes
Unfailing words that destroy
But
I’m not here to stay
I reside on the part of life
Far from this place
I call it home
And I make it my own
Safe
Far from your words

I would like to know what this poem means to you, if anything.

It seems as if you want someone to recognitize you. But, then you seem to say that you are in a sense shy and any judgement pass you will take it into your very core. That can be a dangerous and terrible responsibility for one person to have. Good Poem