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Being a wedding of the richest

illuminations overwhelm

cuisines are multinational

entertainments abound

charter flights throng the skies

eyes look above

perhaps nothing to see on the ground

as gentlemen and ladies

clad in brocade and tussar silk

decked with diamonds

with feet an inch above

sail like a waft of air

laden with aroma

Hermes Birkin bags dangle

while Rolex watches tick

the bride and the groom

turn a speck in the ocean

where extravaganza gobbles.

solemnity.

That being the event of the year.



Few uncaught by the ostentation

Wish the couple austerity and wisdom

in the midst of prosperity obvious.

Hi Meena, hope you have a great new year....
I enjoyed these lines the best:

clad in brocade and tussar silk

decked with diamonds

with feet an inch above

sail like a waft of air

laden with aroma

especially "sail like a waft of air/ laden with aroma"

Also, the last 3 lines should be dropped... too telling and not as interesting as the rest of the poem

Great subject, well written. I agree with Bob concerning the final lines.

Am happy that you enjoyed the lines.
The last three lines, you feel, should be dropped.
I will consider in my revision.
Thanks, Bob.

Thanks, IndianaDP.
Oh ! the final lines pose a problem.
Must give a thought.

Very nice, I understand you had this nominated, it deserved the nod.

Thanks, Frank.
It has not been nominated.

Yes, it has.

Where?

Seek and you will find.