Psalmic lines: "I am with you always"

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Michael (MV)
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Psalmic lines: "I am with you always"

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 24 Mar 2019, 18:57

(upon remembering the writing life of senior poet, W.S. Merwin

RIP -
Peace, Yes
but no longer a need for rest

rest is for tired
with Heaven
no longer ever tired

thus never ever a want for or need of sleep

sleeping in Heavenly peace
the lull without a bye)


Lord make me
an instrument
of your Creativity

Inspired
never to expire

and not invented us
Spirit move us
to play our God-given part
with the God-created part

The Heart

like Our Father
like His children
kin in King
kin in kind
brother & sister we
all kinds to His kingdom come


if laugh-lines wrinkle with ennui
the strands are just evolving out of fashion
moving in mysterious ways but not a mystery
now evermore formidable for the compassion

Providence & patience
when passion is spent
then genius looking
& sounding like Jesus
will find Christ Life
never goes out of print


go ask Cathy & Heathcliff
Emily Bronte & all kindred spirits of our family
I believe we'll feel the free of the flesh
in the flash of the Miracle Lift

BobBradshaw
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Re: Psalmic lines: "I am with you always"

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 27 Mar 2019, 20:52

These are the lines I like most, the last stanza my favorite.
go ask Cathy & Heathcliff
Emily Bronte & all kindred spirits of our family

I would look to cut...the laugh-lines stanza is the first stanza I would remove

capricorn
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Re: Psalmic lines: "I am with you always"

#3 Post by capricorn » 28 Mar 2019, 03:44

I agree with everything Bob has suggested, Michael.

I love the last stanza too.

Eira

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