I Am A Daughter

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meenas17
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I Am A Daughter

#1 Post by meenas17 » 03 Jul 2019, 17:18

The months
of June and July
being auspicious
holds weddings,
house warming,
and inaugurations.

I make to the most
being personally
invited.Gives a chance
to see acquaintances
and relatives. A joy
whatsoever.

The moment I enter
the one or the other
look at me curious.
Knot their eyebrows
ask "you are Saraswathi's
daughter?"

In an another event
a senior comes forward
recalls my father
relates me to him.
He turns happy, as
he has guessed right.

I nod and walk
wondering , how long
would I be known so.
Parents left fifteen
years ago. Even today
they seem to live
and circulate.
meenas17

BobBradshaw
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Re: I Am A Daughter

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 04 Jul 2019, 04:40

The closing 4 lines are the best lines, and the heart of the poem

meenas17
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Re: I Am A Daughter

#3 Post by meenas17 » 06 Jul 2019, 12:19

Thanks, Bob.
The poem is from my heart.
I am known as a daughter of someone still.
When will I be known as myself?
Is this a blessing or curse? Not sure,
meenas17

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