Algernon Charles Swinburne

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Algernon Charles Swinburne

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 06 Aug 2019, 21:06

V2:
Algernon Charles Swinburne

Lean like a flamingo,
he boasted a cataract of red hair—
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,

his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about

a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.

Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon

preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--

would sigh and swoon
in faints of adulation
at his readings,

piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers

onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.

V1:

Algernon Charles Swinburne

He was lean
like a flamingo, his beak
as distinct.

He boasted a cataract of red hair
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,

his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about

a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.

Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon

preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--

would sigh and swoon
in faints of adoration
at his readings,

piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers

onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.

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Billy
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#2 Post by Billy » 06 Aug 2019, 22:25

Perfect, don’t change a thing. Nomination worthy or send it out.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 07 Aug 2019, 00:56

Nice ride. I love it.

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#4 Post by BobBradshaw » 08 Aug 2019, 07:01

Billy, thank you... I might send it out... something to think about
Ken... glad you enjoyed it

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#5 Post by meenas17 » 10 Aug 2019, 09:26

Enjoyed, Bob.
meenas17

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#6 Post by BobBradshaw » 10 Aug 2019, 22:50

Thanks, Meenas

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#7 Post by Michael (MV) » 21 Aug 2019, 09:53

 
Hi Bob,

I have liked this since I first read it earlier in the month, esp the sensuous movement that articulates - à la Swinbourne - the finale

^^ yet workshop suggesting "adulation" for "adoration"


workshop consider for the opening:

Flamingo-lean
with a beak as distinct;
he even boasted

a cataract of red hair,
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,



8)

Michael (MV)



 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#8 Post by SivaRamanathan » 22 Aug 2019, 03:20

Bob
Reads well.Moves forward nicely.Like the last image of coats slipping ith ease.

S

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#9 Post by BobBradshaw » 22 Aug 2019, 20:29

MIchael, Siva -- thank you

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#10 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 Aug 2019, 21:30

A slight revision

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#11 Post by Kenneth2816 » 27 Aug 2019, 11:21

Id like to nominate it Bob

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Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

#12 Post by BobBradshaw » 27 Aug 2019, 19:53

Thank you, Ken...appreciate a nom

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