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Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 06 Aug 2019, 21:06
by BobBradshaw
V2:
Algernon Charles Swinburne

Lean like a flamingo,
he boasted a cataract of red hair—
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,

his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about

a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.

Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon

preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--

would sigh and swoon
in faints of adulation
at his readings,

piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers

onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.

V1:

Algernon Charles Swinburne

He was lean
like a flamingo, his beak
as distinct.

He boasted a cataract of red hair
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,

his poetry accused
of being just as confused
as he was when sloshing about

a room spilling brandy
or shrieking hysterically
like a peacock.

Yet he did have his fans,
often women who--
not knowing Algernon

preferred flogging
to copulation, pain and drunkenness
his antidotes to boredom--

would sigh and swoon
in faints of adoration
at his readings,

piling together, like coats
which slip with ease
from their hangers

onto the polished floor,
having come undone at a touch
or the thought of such.

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 06 Aug 2019, 22:25
by Billy
Perfect, don’t change a thing. Nomination worthy or send it out.

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 07 Aug 2019, 00:56
by Kenneth2816
Nice ride. I love it.

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 08 Aug 2019, 07:01
by BobBradshaw
Billy, thank you... I might send it out... something to think about
Ken... glad you enjoyed it

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 10 Aug 2019, 09:26
by meenas17
Enjoyed, Bob.

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 10 Aug 2019, 22:50
by BobBradshaw
Thanks, Meenas

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 21 Aug 2019, 09:53
by Michael (MV)
 
Hi Bob,

I have liked this since I first read it earlier in the month, esp the sensuous movement that articulates - à la Swinbourne - the finale

^^ yet workshop suggesting "adulation" for "adoration"


workshop consider for the opening:

Flamingo-lean
with a beak as distinct;
he even boasted

a cataract of red hair,
but was just as famous
for his drunken pratfalls,



8)

Michael (MV)



 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 22 Aug 2019, 03:20
by SivaRamanathan
Bob
Reads well.Moves forward nicely.Like the last image of coats slipping ith ease.

S

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 22 Aug 2019, 20:29
by BobBradshaw
MIchael, Siva -- thank you

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 26 Aug 2019, 21:30
by BobBradshaw
A slight revision

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 27 Aug 2019, 11:21
by Kenneth2816
Id like to nominate it Bob

Re: Algernon Charles Swinburne

Posted: 27 Aug 2019, 19:53
by BobBradshaw
Thank you, Ken...appreciate a nom